雅思写作语言素材积累:政府类(3)

2022-06-07 09:57:14

  一篇好的雅思作文不仅看作者的排篇布局的能力,还要看作者语言的表达能力。语言素材是需要积累的,下面

  雅思写作语言素材积累:政府类

  some people think that the amount of noise that people make should be restricted controlled,some people think that noise should be made as much as they wish,discuss both sides and give your opinion?有人认为应该严格控制噪音,有人认为人可以任意制造噪音, 讨论两种观点?(新题出现)

  薛鹏解析:小鹏哥预测1月17日重点题目为政府限制传播审查,政府给教育医疗买单,属于政府职能话题,1月17日雅思写作考察是否控制噪音,也属于政府职能范畴。小鹏哥预测1月17日环保类话题:增加油料价格是解决环境污染的最佳途径。1月17日考察控制噪音,属于环保类话题。

  头脑风暴导言:小鹏哥在2012年在香港旅行期间读过一篇文章:大陆游客最令香港人讨厌的行为之一就是地铁,公交车上大声喧哗,或者,外放手机音乐。小鹏哥的生活乐趣之一就是在一个悠闲的下午去咖啡馆找一个最安静的角落写作语料库,但是,旁边热恋情侣的聊聊我我(谈天说地)总是令我很难专注于工作。我也曾经听过一篇很有趣的听力文章:噪音会影响植物的成长,研究的结果显示噪音很可能导致植物枯萎憔悴。雅思阅读中也有一个关于噪音的片段:在噪音程度不同的环境中学习的孩子,其学习表现差异很大。这些细节都可以作为支持控制噪音的论据。说到底,雅思写作博取高分依赖的是人生阅历和勤奋思考,行文的细节和例证对比模板和空谈更加能够赢得考官的青睐。噪音控制是一个看似无趣的话题,但是,我们依然要用一篇主题明确,逻辑清晰,例证饱满,词句精彩,首尾呼应的文章展示自己的写作才华。

  作家立场:政府控制噪音的数量,这一点势在必行。

  薛鹏思路拓展:

  支持控制噪音的理由:

  1. 我引用一个调查证明我的立场,比之就读于安静社区小学的学生,那些就读于吵闹的机场附近小学的学生更难精力集中。

  2. 作为专栏作家,我以在咖啡馆里写作为乐,我愿意为安静的写作环境买一杯高价咖啡,然而,咖啡店里有时候会冒出两个蠢透了的话痨来打破这份安静,在意外的噪音的干扰下,我很难专注于工作。

  3. 我在英国旅行期间,发现旅客们自觉地把手机调成静音,关掉音响,连闲聊都尽量小声。相反,在我的城市,很多人喜欢公共场所大声喧哗或者外放手机音乐。因此,向那些噪音制造者收取罚款无疑会减少噪音。

  反对控制噪音的理由:

  1. 人们可以适应各种噪音,可能起初,我们会对噪音感动烦恼,但是,我们慢慢就适应了噪音,可以继续我们的学习工作,生活娱乐。

  2. 外放手机音乐,大声讲话,驾车中鸣笛,在自己家中开派对或者练习乐器都是一种基本权利,不可以被剥夺。

  薛鹏原创范文赏析:

  首段:个性开篇 + 作家立场

  Have you ever annoyed by unexpected intrusions of noise that prevents your peaceful trips. Have you exposed to bursts of noise when you work on one task. Have you felt tired of living with chronic city noise day after day.I believe every individual prefer a peaceful and quiet environment to a noisy one.

  首段点评:文无定法;个性开篇;惜墨如金。

  二段:正方观点论据拓展以及例证和细节:

  It is imperative for the government to strictly control the amount of noise in our life. First, a survey can prove my stand,compared with students who attended schools in quiet neighborhoods,the counterparts attended schools near noisy airport are liable to suffer from distraction. Also,the debate reminds me of my experience, as a columnist,I take pleasure in creating new essays in a café and I pay high price for a quiet environment,however,there are,sometimes,two inane babblers to break the silence,I can hardly zero in on work under noisy circumstances . Last, when I made a self-travel in England, I found that all travelers voluntarily switched phones to silent, turned stereos off and kept chatter to a minimum. Conversely, in my city, some people never notice that they become nuisances by talking aloud, playing cell phone music in public. So, fining people for making a din will definitely dissuade the polluter and be proved to be a neat solution.

  二段点评:首句亮明观点政府应该控制噪音;三个细节支持:第一;研究调查显示噪音不同的环境对于学生们的学习带来不同影响。第二,个人经历,谈及噪音对于工作的影响。第三,谈及旅行的经历,对比反证强调政府应该向个人制造噪音的行为收取罚款。

  Tip:小鹏哥没有英国旅行的经历(其实我的去的是泰国),以英国为例,增强考官的国家荣誉感,课取悦考官,对比反证谈及到自己的城市,也是忠实于自己真诚情感的表达。对比之后,自然过渡到政府应该对个人噪音制造者罚款。(即为政府要控制噪音);当然,,禁止建筑企业夜间施工等,只要自圆其说,文无定法。

  三段:他人口吻谈及反方观点:两个论据的展开:

  Others,however,think differently.First, some people argue that the noise might, at first , be quite annoying,however,people might do well at their tasks after a while because humans are capable of adjusting to a manifold noise levels. Further, some people may believe that making noise randomly is a basic right which can never be deprived. Hence,some people are in the habit of having a noisy party or loudly playing musical instrument at home, or constantly honking the horn when driving a car. What I am worried about is that the right of making noise might be abused.

  三段点评:他人口吻引导反方观点,再简单反驳反方观点,立场一致。

  尾段:总结作家立场:

  Apparently,every government should be urged to reduce or eliminate the adverse effects of noise.

  薛鹏原创基础语料库:

  1. control over v控制……

  2. noise pollution n噪音污染

  3. noisy environment n吵闹的环境

  4. intrusions of noise n噪音的干扰

  5. expose to bursts of noise v接触到噪音

  6. make noise randomly v任意制造噪音

  7. make a din v 发出喧闹声

  8. noise maker n发出噪音者

  9. be annoyed by …… v 被 …… 烦扰

  10. nuisance n令人讨厌的人或者物

  薛鹏全文总结:全文350字,可在现场完成创作;(推荐字数为320-360);本文中童鞋可以学习到的是首段自然的个性开篇:三个问句引导噪音污染带来的烦恼,随之自然亮明作家立场。二段先强调主题句,再以三个论据支持作家立场。三段以他人口口吻展开反方观点,再简单反驳反方观点,完成任务指令的同时,保证逻辑清晰。尾段简洁收尾,再次强调作家立场。

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