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对于中国学生而言,还有额外的烦恼,语言问题就是最头疼的地方之一。凑高级单词,凑复杂冗长的句式,以为单词
NB,句子写的看不懂就是好作文,实际上这样的作文对于考官来说,冗长,晦涩,用词错误不断,句式混乱。拥有这些特征的作文怎么能不得 3 分呢?
如果你的文章拥有上述的特征,那么你的 issue 还停留在入门阶段,避免这些问题,才是踏上正轨的第一部。如果你的文章没有这些特征,那么恭喜,在 issue 道路上你已具备了向高分冲击的基础。
仍是和刚才一样的题目,下面再来看一篇 4 分的作文。
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The need for generalists is undeniable but one can not underestimate the need and importance of specialists. The medical profession is a good example of an area that requires both generalists and specialists. If there were no generalists in the profession there would be no one to help patients determine when a specialist was needed. There are certain problems that a general practitioner can take care of and there are other problems that are out of his or her league. The general practitioner is the an appropriate place to start when a patient develops a problem. Many times the general practitioner is more than capable of handling problems that arise and other times he or she is
unable to fully take control of the patient's care. It isn't a fault with the general practitioners. There is just too much to know for any one person to be an expert on all topics. It takes people years to
become experts on a single topic, never mind being an expert on everything in the medical profession.
I am currently working in a large teaching hospital where the need for both general practitioners and specialists is obvious. When a patient is admitted to a general medicine floor, the general
medicine physicians are not always able to deal with every problem the patient has without some
help from the specialists. It would be unrealistic, not to mention unfair to the general practitioners, to expect the general practitioners to know everything about everything. The key is to know where
everyone's knowledge and area of expertise lie and use their strengths to optimize patient care.
On the general medicine team in which I worked, the team would constantly be requesting consults from specialists. Whether it be a renal, psychiatric, orthopedic, rehabilitation, speech,
gastroenterologist, or any other specialist, their input was constantly needed and used to get the
patient well as quickly as possible. The list of specialists can go on longer than one would think and it is just impossible for one person to know everything about each one of them. ; m) X* b0 C( z* h7 n& F n
Although the need for generalists is apparent, it would be hard to survive without specialists, also.
When a person acts as a generalist, they know little bit about everything, but certainly not a totally inclusive knowledge of everything. The specialist is there to help add the expertise and inclusive knowledge that the generalist may be lacking. The most important thing to remember with specialists and generalists is to recognize both's strengths and weaknesses and capitalize on the
strengths to achieve whatever goal may be desired.
同样的,不要看不起 4 分的作文,从这两年的分数调查来看,接近九成的中国学生的 issue
在 4 分或者以下。这篇 4 分作文也有它可取的地方,下面具体来看看:
1.观点明确;从第一段开始就明确的提出,专才和通才都是需要的,后面的段落也顺承了这
一点
2.论点辩证;看到了这个 issue 的复杂性,专才和通才都有各自的用武之地,也讲出了这两
者如何追求一个平衡。
3.例证有力;用自己在医院工作的亲身经历来说明专才和通才在实战中的角色和责任。不落俗套,很好的支撑了文章。
4.语言得体;表意清晰,没有造成什么理解上的难处。整体上感觉也还算流畅,逻辑连接词用的比较合适,展示了一定的语言驾驭能力。
这篇文章可以说基本完成了对题目的回应。其中的优点也是很多学生没有做到的,比如例证偏离主题或者描述例证不清晰,假定读者知道例证的背景让人在读例证的时候云里雾里;语言晦涩,逻辑连接词混乱;亦或者是观点前后矛盾。