2014年12月13日雅思写作解析及语料库
12月13日雅思写作真题回忆：
Shops should not be allowed to sell any foods and drinks which are scientifically proved to be harmful for people's health. 商店是否应该禁止销售科学上证明是有害健康的食物饮料?
薛鹏点评：健康类话题，新题出现。
主题观点：商店应该禁止销售有害健康的食品饮料。
思路拓展：商店为何不能销售有害健康的食品：
1. 政府的职责所在，因为政府有不可推卸的责任保证企业合法经营和保障公民的健康。设想，如果政府不处罚不限制非健康食品，就会鼓励非健康食品的销售以及推广。
2. 有害消费者的健康，同时，食用有害健康的食品不仅仅有害健康，也可能带来家人的痛苦，还可能浪费公共的医疗资源。
3. 有损于商家的信誉，相反，有诚信商家销售健康食品，长远而言，企业盈利。
薛鹏原创范文赏析：
首段：背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 写作目的
One of the noticeable phenomena is that some shops have been selling many heath-threatening foods and drinks out of the purpose of reaping profits illegally, which has long been a problem of great concern and complaint in numerous countries. Under this circumstance, an opinion seems to enjoy great popularity that physically detrimental foods should be banned. I am in support of the above statement and this essay endeavors to exemplify my stand.
薛鹏解析：
1. One of the noticeable phenomena is that …… 一个显著的现象就是……
2. out of the purpose of reaping profits illegally 出于非法牟利的目的
3. …… has long been a problem of great concern and complaint in numerous countries. 在很多国家，……成为人们关注和抱怨的问题
4. This essay endeavors to exemplify my opinion. 本文将努力证明我的立场
二段：第一次支持作家立场
My first convincing reason can be easily explored. The government, as a decision-maker, is the representative of citizen’s basic interests. In this sense, every governmental policy will inevitably exert a profound influence on its citizens’ well-being index. One of the compelling obligations of the government is to guarantee every food enterprise’s licit business so that the basic interest of its citizens could be ensured. It is conceivable that more sales of health-threatening foods will be encouraged if a nation fails to penalize or restrict those foods containing physically harmful elements.
薛鹏解析：
1. …… will inevitably exert a profound influence on 对于……有深远的影响
2. One of the indispensable obligations of the government is to 政府不可推卸的责任之一就是去……
3. It is conceivable that 可以想象
4. a nation fails to penalize or restrict 一个国家未能处罚和限制
三段：第二次支持作家立场
Another argument I could like to turn to justify my stand is that too much intake of unwholesome some foods will, by all means, undermine one’s health. Specifically, many foods or drinks contain excessive food additives or toxic chemicals，which might contribute to some health-related problems. Chronic disease is a good case in point. Even worse, the unexpected illnesses might bring huge agonies to the family members. Worse of all, free medical care might be unnecessarily wasted if the proportion of unhealthy citizens keeps on soaring.
薛鹏解析：
1. too much intake of unwholesome foods 过量食用非健康食品
2. contain excessive food additives or toxic chemicals 含有过量的食品添加剂或是有毒的化学成分
3. might contribute to some health-related problems 也许会导致很多健康问题
4. is a good case in point ……就是很好的例子
5. keeps on soaring 持续上升
四段：第三次支持作家立场：
To make the final point，relevant shopping malls，supermarkets or plazas could achieve profitability if they could establish fine sale fame among their buyers，on the contrary, if their food safety problem is reported by local news papers, then, the public will lose their trust in them and the relevant enterprises’ reputation will end up being greatly ruined. Therefore, it is rather groundless to support the proposal of allowing shops to sell unwholesome foods.(75)
薛鹏解析：
1. shopping malls，supermarkets or plazas 购物中心，超市或者大型商都#p#分页标题#e#
2. achieve profitability 实现盈利
3. Therefore, it is rather groundless to support the proposal of 因此，支持……的建议是相当没有根据的
尾段：再次亮明观点 + 总结理由
In a nutshell，I re-affirm my stand that every government ought to be urged to adopt feasible measures to minimize the baneful impacts triggered by the sale of unhealthy foods or drinks. After all, the health of its social citizens indicates fine governmental prestige, harmonious family relationship, improved health index and the everlasting profit-making competence of food industry.
薛鹏解析：
1. Every government ought to be urged to adopt feasible measures to minimize the baneful impacts triggered by ……政府应该被督促去采取可行措施以减少由……引起的不良影响
2. fine governmental prestige 良好的政府威信
3. harmonious family relationship 和谐的家庭关系
4. improved health index 提高的健康指数
5. the everlasting profit-making competence of food industry 食品产业持久的盈利能力
薛鹏原创语料库：
1. is harmful to consumers’ health有害消费者的健康
2. is detrimental to consumers’ health 有害消费者的健康
3. undermine one’s health 有害健康
解析：undermine v暗中破坏
4. …… is health-threatening ……是威胁健康
5. …… exert a detrimental influence on health 对于健康施加了不良影响
解析：exert a detrimental influence on = have a really adverse impact on 对于……施加了不良的影响
拓展：have a positive influence on 有积极的影响
拓展：exert a beneficial influence on 有利好的影响
6. ruin the relevant enterprises’ reputation 有损于相关企业的知名度
解析：ruin v破坏……
拓展：do harm to the fame of the shops 有害企业的名誉
7. It is impetrative for the government to enact relevant laws to ensure the security of food sale. 政府立法保障食品销售的安全是势在必行的。
解析：It is imperative for the government to enact relevant laws to ……政府立法做……是势在必行的
8. Many foods contain too much food additives， which might lead to health-related problems 很多含有过量的食品添加剂的食品, 也许带来很多健康相关问题。
解析：food addictives n食品添加剂
拓展：environment-related problems 和环境保护相关的问题
9. …… impose much pressure on consumers economically v增加消费者的经济负担
拓展：impose much pressure on a nation economically 增加了政府的经济压力
点评：句型可以用于反驳政府的投资政策
10. Relevant shopping malls or plazas could achieve profitability if they establish fine sale fame among the buyers. 如果企业可以在消费者中建立良好的销售信誉，企业是可以实现盈利的。
11. Therefore, it is rather superficial and groundless to support the proposal of allowing shops to sell unwholesome foods. 允许商家去销售有害健康的食品是相当肤浅的和没有根据的。
12. The health of family members indicates our harmonious and happy family relationship 家人的健康意味着和谐幸福的家庭关系。