托福写作22个失分点!

2022-05-20 23:16:24

  大家必须要注意到,写作是应用写作,重点考察了大家的语言表述能力,但并非是文学创作能力。考生追求的基本目标是把想说的意思用书面英语表达清楚,让阅卷人读懂和明白。关于中国考生在个失分点,一起来了解一下!

  1.结构不平行

  例子:I was able to raise my TOEFL score by studying hard and I read lots of books.

  将一系列的单词连接起来的时候,应当使用词性相同或同一类型的短语。

  2.不知所云

  例子:Many companies began using computers mouth.

  3.段落过长,不分段,主语与动词一致问题

  例子:She are a good friend of mine that I has known for a long time.

  主语和动词不一致。

  4.句子别扭

  例子:We heated the soup in the microwave for too long and the shape of the container changed.

  措辞过长或不清。换言之,句子显得滑稽可笑。

  5.拼写错误主语、动词或宾语有问题

  例子:I want to buy something for my mother that she will like it. There was a terrible accident happen yesterday.

  句子的基本结构有问题,缺少主语、动词或宾语,或者这些成分重复。

  6.语气与文章不符

  例子:I was kind of mad at the guy who vociferated angry words at me. I have heard many wonderful things about such cosmopolitan cities as Paris, London, Tokyo, and Hong Kong and I would love to visit these cities to check them out.

  语气与文章其他部分不相符,可能是过于正式或者太不正式。

  7.代词指代不明

  例子:If people do not speak the same language, it has a greater chance of miscommunication. I intend to complete my studies in the United States because they have good programs there.

  代词所指代的指示词(介词所代替的名词)不清楚。

  8.过于笼统

  例子:We should use our resources on Earth because the Earth is getting worse.

  句子或者所表达的意思过于笼统,不能提供多少信息。

  9.动词时态错误

  例子:Yesterday I will go to the store because tomorrow I needed some food.

  动词时态不正确,检查一下是应该用现在时、过去时、将来时或者是完成时等等。

  10.介词多余

  例子:I would like to discuss about something important that you mentioned about to me during yesterday. We went to downtown yesterday to buy a watch. When I first came to the US, I did not have a lot of friends in here. In class, my classmate never mentioned about her husband.

  在表示这种意思时此单词不能与介词连用。这种情况常见于downtown,home,there,here等词。这些词语在英语中是副词而非名词,因而不能在它们前面添加介词。

  11.跑题或不相关

  例子:There are many reasons to buy a car, preferably a nice car.这个与okay for children to fail sometimes.所表达的意思很普通,大多数人都已经知道了,因而就没有必要再说出来。

  12.标点问题

  例子:I love animals. And I like to help them. Because they are helpless. So I want to become a vet.

  许多学生在句子中使用了太多的句号,尤其是当他们用手写的时候。

  13.重复冗余

  例子:Personally, I believe what the newspaper prints.

  一种意思的表述不止一次,或者某个词语不必要。

  14.单数/复数

  例子:Many year ago, dinosaur roamed the Earths.

  单词需要从单数变为复数,或者由复数变成单数。单数可数名词不能单独使用,应该将其变为复数形式或者加上限定词(a, the, my, his, her, Gary’s, no, any, 1, 3, 50, most,等等)。

  15.不要使用缩写

  在正式的写作中不要使用缩写形式(can’t,don’t,it’s,we’ll,they’ve等等),而应当使用单词的完整形式(cannot,do not,it is,we will,they have等等)。

  16.关联词语重复

  例子:Since I want to go to a good school, therefore I am trying to raise my test scores.

  不能在该句的主要主语和主要动词前使用连词。

  17.句子不完整

  例子:Many students have a hard time passing all the tests to getsintoscollege. For example, my friend in high school.

  句子没有主要主语或主要动词,因为其实它应是一个从句。这是一个非常常见的错误,修改的方法是将两个句子连接起来。

  18.不要使用get

  例子:When I got home, I got tired, so I got a book and gotsintosbed.

  get太不正式,意思也过于含糊,不适合用在正式的场合。应将get改为一个更加具体的单词,如become, receive, find, achieve,等等。

  19.书写难以辨认信息不正确

  例子:I would like to study in America because all modern technology originated there.

  传递信息不正确,或者让人听起来觉得可能不正确(如果确实是正确的,应当解释为什么这样,因为读者不认为是正确的)。上述例句中,all的意思是百分之百,我们不能绝对地说每一件新东西都是从美国诞生的。为保险起见,应当使用many或most。非英语单词Computers are very helpful and advantageable,尽管看起来像个单词,其实不是,至少不是个英文单词。使用这个单词的另一种形式。

  20.选词不恰当

  例子:I was late getting home because I lost my way.

  在这种情况下不应该使用该词,可选择更好的词语。

  21.单词形式不当

  例子:I want to creation a great web site so that I can becoming wealth.

  所使用的单词的形式不正确,检查一下应该使用该词的名词、形容词或副词形式的哪一种。

  22.用词错误

  例子:Even I don’t speak Spanish, I was able to find a bathroom in the department store. I gained a lot of pounds during vacation.

  用词错误或在此种情况下该词不是最佳用词。

  希望大家能从中受益,不断改进自己的备考方法提升备考效率,从而获得满意的成绩。


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