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Topic: Since the world is busy and crowded, people don't need to be polite to others. Agree or disagree?
One paragraph from my student:
Being polite improves our relationships and thus increases our efficiency. Indeed, we have to pay more cost to deal with a lot of people such as roommates, classmates, workmates and new friends, which seems that if we don't have to treat these relationships politely, it could save more time and energy to focus on something more productive such as our own business, career or habits. However, politeness can be a tool used to show our friendliness and respect to others, and they usually do the same to us, which help us to save our time and energy to ensure things well. If we need help, we couldn't expect that we are yelling someone rudely and at the same time ask him to do us a favor.
这一段学生写的观点还是可以的，我们来看一下这样一段还可以怎样去写，从而在内容和语言上更好地体现我们的亮点。
Nobody can deny that we can benefit from showing courtesy. On one hand, the competition in modern society has attached cooperation with unprecedented significance since different individual has their distinct ability, specialty, and insightful ideas which can be rather contributing. Indeed, effective cooperation base itself on harmonious relationships with others. If we show others none politeness and ignore their feeling just because we are busy, the negatively influenced ties with others, say our teammates, workmates, will undoubtedly hinder our collaboration which can be destructive for both bosses and employees. Beside, being polite can also save ourselves a lot of unnecessary frictions and displeasure. Image we had a serious quarrel with some one on morning subway just because he or she unconsciously pushed us due to overcrowds. We will be engulfed in an unhappy mood the whole day and this can decline our working passion and efficiency. This is not worthy and can be avoided. In this case, and most cases actually, showing politeness is certainly a more advisable choice.
现在大家知道好文章应该具备怎样的特点了吧?!记住一点，好的文章不管从内容还是语言都是精炼的。每一个词，每一句话都有明确的写作目的和写作意义，我们不需要凑字，也不需要模板，因为这些都不能体现你的思维能力和你的亮点，要务实，要通过文章体现你对这个世界的认识和理解，这才是最重要的。
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