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为了使学生在有限的时间以最佳的状态一气呵成,临场发挥是不可取的,通过无数考生的亲身验证,我们发现即使考生英语水平非常好,写作不做任何准备去应考也是风险很大的。因此,考生务必在考试之前做好充足的准备工作。
既然要准备充足,方方面面的工作都要细究,今天要细究的内容是开头部分,我们将通过一条实例给大家讲一下首段的写作思路和段落结构。
经过一段时间的备考,很多同学对于独立写作题目涉及的话题应该是比较熟悉了,在进行首段结构讲解之前,希望大家思考这样一个问题:独立写作中所涉及的这些话题,为什么会被ETS考官选中,放在一个全球性的语言考试中呢?大家可以再回顾一下独立写作的一些题目,他们其实都有一个共同的性质,那就是它所涉及的话题和内容,都是大家熟知的,并且会引起人们的讨论的话题,也就是考生们“普遍知晓”,并能“引起讨论”。因此我们得出托福独立写作题目的两个特点:一是具有“普遍性”,二是具有“可讨论性”。
所谓“普遍性”,就是题目涉及的内容大家都熟知,例如,曾经有这样一个题目:A/D:The telephone has greater effects on people than television。题目当中的television 和telephone都是大家熟知的事物,起码对于所有托福考生来说,大家都肯定是再熟悉不过的东西了,所以这样的事物出现在题目中,是具有公平性的;
所谓“可讨论性”,就是指题目所涉及的话题有可讨论的价值,如同辩论赛的论题一样,它是可以让正反双方展开讨论的,他的观点是辩证的。
根据这两个特点,我们总结了一种开头段的结构,这个结构有三部分组成:第一部分——体现普遍性;第二部分——体现可讨论性;第三部分——得出立场或者文章打算;这里的第三部分根据大家文章行文思路的不同而进行不同的段落收尾就可以了,下面我们根据这个结构理论来进行一个题目的讲解:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To achieve successful development of a country,a government should spend more money on young children's education(5-10) rather than on universities。
同意/不同意:为了一个国家的发展,政府应当花更多的钱在儿童教育上,而不是大学教育上。
这是一个教育类的话题,同时涉及到政府拨款的问题,涵盖两个方面的比较,一个是投资儿童教育,一个是投资大学教育。大家试着将这两个方面总结成一个事件
——the issue of how to invest in education
或者——the issue of educational investment
做完这项工作之后就可以按照三部分的结构写出开头段了。
首先要写的是普遍性:
As is often the case, the issue of educational investment is so much concerned that it has aroused a wide discussion。
此句中开头是以as引导的非限制性定语从句,as指代的是逗号后面句子中的全部内容,这件事是经常发生的情形。此句体现了问题的普遍性。
然后就要体现可讨论性了,如何来体现呢,首先,出现可讨论性的前提,就是因为出现了差异,我们可以适当的过度交代一下原因,可如下叙述:
People varying in personalities as well as backgrounds tend to look at the same matter from diversified perspectives。
这句话的意思是,因为人们个性和背景方面各不相同,所以人们往往从不同的角度看待同一个问题。过度之后,进行“可讨论性“的写作:
Some people maintain that investing in primary education is a wise/an optimum option, while others hold that investing in tertiary-level education is sensible/sagacious。
将两部分人的观点进行论述,目的在于通过可讨论性的体现,将题目转化成双方面的观点。之后要做的工作就是段落收尾了,收尾之前也需要进行适当的铺垫In taking various factors into consideration, 其中take…into consideration 代表“考虑”之意,相当于consider something,之后,根据行文方式的不同选择不同的收尾方式,下面给大家两中选择:
——I reckon that elementary education and high-level education are intertwined elements that are playing respective roles in the process of one’s growth。
这种收尾方式偏向中庸之道,后面的行文也多倾向于分情况讨论的思路;
——I reckon that it is the latter/former claim that makes more sense/ bears more rationality。
这种收尾方式思路方向比较确定,一般选择立论文的考生会选择。
综上我们将这篇文章整合汇总如下:
In recent years /As is often the case, the issue of educational investment is so much concerned that it has aroused a wide discussion. People varying in personalities as well as backgrounds tend to look at the same matter from diversified perspectives. Some people maintain that investing in primary education is an optimum option, while others hold that investing in tertiary-level education is sensible. In taking various factors into consideration, I reckon that elementary education and high-level education are intertwined elements that are playing respective roles in the process of one’s growth。
(I reckon that it is the latter/former claim that makes more sense / bears more rationality。)
大家可以看到,在文中多次出现初级教育和高等教育的词组,但上文却采取了不同的表达方式,primary education对应于elementary education,tertiary-leveleducation相对应于high-level education。因此,向大家强调一点是,如果在一个段落,或者一篇文章中,我们不可避免的会遇到重复意思的表达,这时候,希望大家多多积累同近义词的短语和词组,用于文章当中将会显得语言更加丰富。
许多考生在学习之初可以适当的背诵段落和词句,因为提高写作做好的方法就是临摹和套用,大家可以将上述段落中的下划线部分看做模板句式,非下划线部分可以根据题目来进行填充。下面我们利用上述模板,来练习另一道题目:
In your opinion, which one is better, to spend money on something that lasts for a long time, such as valuable jewelry, or spend your money on short term pleasure such as vacation?
花钱买贵重物品还是去短期度假
首段:
As is often the case, the issue of money spending is so much concerned that it has aroused a wide discussion. People varying in personalities as well as backgrounds tend to look at the same matter from diversified perspectives. Some people maintain that spending on jewelry is a wise/ an optimum option, while others hold that spending on vacation is sensible/ sagacious. In taking various factors into consideration,I reckon that material life and spiritual enjoyment are intertwined elements that are playing respective roles in daily life。
由此,这篇文章的首段就完成了,在写作之初,建议大家多多学习范文或模板的写作,但不容忽视的是,模板性越强的段落应用性和灵活性越差,所以,在托福备考进行到一定程度时,希望大家更多地组建自己最顺手的模板段落或句型,并且多加练习,只有这样,在面临写作题目的时候,才能“临危不惧”地一气呵成。