雅思写作机经大作文2012年12月15日
题目: We live in cities or towns which have museums displaying objects of artistic, historic and cultural value, but people do not visit them.
How do you think people do not visit museums in their local areas?
What is the importance of museums to the society?
Nowadays, many cities have their own museums. However, few people would like to spend free time visiting them, and many people fail to realize the significance of museums. In this essay, I will examine the reasons for the problem and analyze the importance of the construction of museums.
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段落此段结构1 描述现实
2 总起全文
此段功能首段描述全文的大纲和主要内容
Firstly, it is crystal-clear that social competition is increasingly fierce and they suffer lots of work pressure. As a consequence, their spare time for recreation is gradually reducing. Apart from this, another reason contributing to this problem is that there is a shortage of the government’s proper guidance, so people do not realize the importance of cultural and educational value of traditional things.
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段落此段结构1 第一个原因：社会竞争越来越激烈，人们的工作压力大，没有时间去博物馆
2 第二个原因：政府没有很好的引导，人们没有意识到传统文化的重要性
此段功能本段是文章第二段， 解决了题干的第一个问题
Museums are good places to educate students, as they can have a direct touch on the exhibits, which is more vivid and educational than course books. By visiting museums, students can deeply understand what they have acquired from textbooks. Museums possess advanced equipment and secure environment which can be used for better protection of antique things. Most importantly, museums are good places for scientists and historians to study history. The findings of such research may achieve international reputation and eventually enhance the sense of national pride of citizens.
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段落此段结构1 博物馆的好处一：教育孩子，让孩子亲身接触到展品
2 好处二：保护文物
3 好处三：给科学家和历史学家提供研究场所
此段功能本段是文章第三段，分析了博物馆的三大好处
To sum up, reasons for people not visiting museums are complicated. We must realize that by visiting museums, people are able to acquire much more knowledge which may not be printed in course books, and they may have a total different experience due to the direct and vivid learning process for recreation.
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段落此段结构总结全文
此段功能对题干的两大要求：原因和好处进行高度概括。
满分要素剖析：
一、语言表达
本文的语言客观正式，不带任何个人感情色彩。以事实情况为依据回答了题干的两大问题。客观正式的语言体现在文中诸多的名词短语、表达观点的句型、以及否定词的用法。
1. However, few people would like to spend free time visiting them, and many people fail to realize the significance of museums.
本句中运用了两个表示否定的词。有些同学可能会写成However, not many people would like to spend free time visiting them, and many people did not realize the significance of museums.英文的表达里有很多类似的词可以表示否定的意思，写作时要学会灵活用词。如果都用not显得语言单一稚嫩。
2. In this essay, I will examine the reasons for the problem and analyze the importance of the construction of museums.
In this essay, I will examine…and analyze…这个句型可用通于雅思大作文说明类的议论文中。
3. Apart from this, another reason contributing to this problem is that there is a shortage of the government’s proper guidance, so people do not realize the importance of cultural and educational value of traditional things.
注意学习描述原因的句型：Apart from this, another reason contributing to this problem is that…
4. Museums are good places to educate students, as they can have a direct touch on the exhibits, which is more vivid and educational than course books.
本句中as表示原因，解释为什么博物馆是有教育意义的地方。Which引导的从句修饰exhibits，说明展品比书本更加生动，更具有教育意义。
二、逻辑结构
本文为总分总结构，是典型的说明类的雅思议论文。开篇先陈述事实并总括全文脉络，第二段分析原因，第三段说明优点，圆满完成题干的要求。最后一段话对全文进行了高度总结。