托福考试综合写作TOP2(题目+范文赏析)

2022-06-06 21:19:44

  In many organizations, perhaps the best way to approach certain new projects is to assemble a group of people into a team. Having a team of people attack a project offers several advantages.

  First of all, a group of people has a wider range of knowledge,expertise, and skills than any single individual is likely to possess. Also, because of the numbers of people involved and the greater resources they possess, a group can work more quickly in response to the task assigned to it and can come up with highly creative solutions to problems and issues. Sometimes these creative solutions come about because a group is more likely to make risky decisions that an individual might not undertake. This is because the group spreads responsibility for a decision to all the members and thus no single individual can be held accountable if the decision turns out to be wrong.

  Taking part in a group process can be very rewarding for members of the team. Team members who have a voice in making a decision will no doubt feel better about carrying out the work that is entailed by the decision than they might doing work that is imposed on them by others.

  Also, the individual team member has a much better chance to “shine”, to get his or her contributions and ideas not only recognized but recognized as highly significant, because a team’s overall results can be more far-reaching and have greater impact than what might have otherwise been possible for the person to accomplish or contribute working alone.

  Listening

  Professor

  Now I want to tell you about what one company found when it decided that it would turn over some of its new projects to teams of people, and make the team responsible for planning the projects and getting the work done. After about six months, the company took a look at how well the teams performed.

  On virtually every team, some members got almost a "free ride" . . . they didn't contribute much at all, but if their team did a good job, they nevertheless benefited from the recognition the team got. And what about group members who worked especially well and who provided a lot of insight on problems and issues? Well . . . the recognition for a job well done went to the group as a whole, no names were named. So it won't surprise you to learn that when the real contributors were asked how they felt about the group process, their attitude was just the opposite of what the reading predicts.

  Another finding was that some projects just didn't move very quickly. Why? Because it took so long to reach consensus; it took many, many meetings to build the agreement among group members about how they would move the project along. On the other hand, there were other instances where one or two people managed to become very influential over what their group did.

  Sometimes when those influencers said "That will never work" about an idea the group was developing, the idea was quickly dropped instead of being further discussed. And then there was another occasion when a couple influencers convinced the group that a plan of theirs was "highly creative." And even though some members tried to warn the rest of the group that the project was moving in directions that might not work, they were basically ignored by other group members. Can you guess the ending to this story? When the project failed, the blame was placed on all the members of the group.

  一、阅读听力要点概括

  Reading Passage

  Main points: Having a team offers several advantages.

  Sub point 1: Wider knowledge expertise and skills.

  Sub point 2: Group process can be rewarding.

  Sub point 3: Individual team member better to shine.

  Lecture

  Attitude: Turn over project to team and make them responsible.

  Sub Point 1: Some member don't contribute. (Real contributors not happy.)

  Sub Point 2: Took long to reach consensus. (People become influential.)

  Sub Point 3: Influencers can bring fail as well.

  Answers

  二、范文逐段赏析

  Paragraph 1

  The lecturer talks about research conducted by a firm that used a group system to handle their work. He says that the theory stated in the passage was very different and somewhat inaccurate when compared to what happened in reality.

  此段功能:

  (Listening passage后文提到用L代替)

  (Reading passage后文用R代替)

  作者先总结L的意见,L说一间公司进行了一次群组作业的调研。实际的结果和理论中完全不一样。

  此段结构:

  开头段表示了L的逻辑,L将主要讲解R理论中和L实际中的不同。

  Paragraph 2

  First, some members got free rides. That is, some didn’t work hard but nonetheless received recognition for the group’s success. This also indicates that people who worked hard were not given all of the recognition they should have received. In other words, they weren’t given the opportunity to “shine.” This directly contradicts what the reading passage indicates would result from group work.

  此段功能:

  以L的现实引出一个分论点,有些组员根本无所作为,但由于小组成功也获得认可。这样一来那些全力工作的组员并没有得到足够的认可。他们没有得到发光的机会,这样的事实于R陈述的完全相反。

  此段结构:

  此段为总分结构,作者引出L的一系列实证后说明R是错误的。

  Paragraph 3

  Second, groups were slow in progress. The reading passage says that groups are more responsive than individuals because of the number of people involved and their aggregated resources. However, the speaker talks about how the firm found out that groups were slower than individuals in decision making: groups needed more time for meetings, which are necessary procedures in group decision making. This was another place where reality contradicted theory.

  此段功能:

  作者引出第二个事实:群组进度缓慢。R说群组工作会更迅捷因为更多的集合资源。L说群组慢的原因是因为他们做出决定太慢,太多时间开会,这样的时间消耗也是和R的理论相反的。

  此段结构:

  此段为总分结构,L开头摆出来事实结论,随后开始一系列和R的对比。

  Paragraph 4

  Third, influential people might emerge and lead the group towards success or failure. If the influential people are leading in the right direction there would be no problem; but in cases where they go in the wrong direction, there is rarely a person with enough influence to counter the decision made. In other words, the group might turn into a dictatorship, with the influential party as the leader, and subsequently might become less flexible in its thinking. The group might become one-sided, and thus fail to succeed.

  此段功能:

  作者总结了最后一点有影响力的人可能给小组带来的成功或者失败。随后摆出L和R事实:领头羊走在正确的道路上的时候自然没有问题,但是在他们走入错误道路时候,很难有组员能反抗他们的决定。换句话说,,小组会一边倒。

  此段结构:

  此段为总分结构,开头引出结论后,补充了大量的比较和证据。

  三、范文全篇总评

  1、 逻辑结构

  全文遵从总分结构,开头段表明L的怀疑逻辑,随即开始全文的辩论。

  在论段中作者如实的反映双方的情绪和证据,做出对称的对比。论段为开头段服务:R说的理论和L的现实差别很大。

  2、语言表达

  作者用词准确,字里行间不拖泥带水,可以借鉴的词句有:

  1. Aggregated: 聚合的

  The donation aggregates to 10,000 pounds.

  2. Dictatorship:

  /Absolutism/ despotism/

  Many African countries still lives under a military dictatorship

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