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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A person’s childhood years (the time from birth to twelve years of age) are the most important years of a person’s life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I agree that a person’s childhood years, from birth until twelve years of age, are the most important. All the information I’ve read about that time of life and the associated periods of foundational development states that these are the years that form who we are. These years determine what kind of person a child will become. During these years we learn about relationships, begin formal education and develop our moral sense of right and wrong.
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These early years are a critical time to learn about relationships. First we learn about our parents and siblings, then about rest of the world. We learn how to respond to others based on the treatment we receive. If we’re loved, then we know how to show love to others. If we’re treated harshly, we may grow up to treat others harshly. We also form basic opinions and ideas about our own self-worth from the way others treat us during these years. They can convince us we’re worthless, or they can teach us we deserve love and respect.
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本段是一个总分的结构。开头提出论点，即童年是我们对弄清楚人与人之间的关系的关键的时间段。后面对论点进行了进一步解释，可以分为二个层次：首先我们对父母和兄弟姐妹，还有世界的其它部分产生认知；其次是我们会从他人对待自己的方式上形成自己如何对待他人的模式，并且在这些来往中形成自己的世界观和价值观。 |
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These are also the years we begin formal education. We acquire the basic skills - reading, writing, working with numbers - that we’ll use throughout our lives. The many challenges of modern living require a basic foundation in these areas of understanding. Otherwise, anything we try to do later can be undermined by a lack of skills. Perhaps the most important thing we can learn during these years is how to think analytically, and apply mental skills critically. These are skills that will always be useful.
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总分的结构，开头提出论点，即童年也是我们开始受到教育的时间段。接下来分析我们会学到什么关键的东西，这些东西会对我们以后的人生产生何种影响。 |
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Most important, from my point of view, during these years is the development of our moral sense of what’s right and wrong. Others teach us about what defines “good” and “bad,” but we also begin to decide for ourselves and form a base of morality. It’s also during this time that we begin to develop the self-discipline to live according to our perceived morals and ethics.
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总分的结构，开头提出论点，即这些日子是我们的道德判断力，明辨是非的能力形成的关键时间段。然后围绕着道德判断力与对错认知进行了进一步的分析。 |
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I believe a person grows and changes for the better throughout an entire lifetime. However, the foundation for all of life’s experiences is laid in those first few years of life.
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第一句话首先说明人会在时间长河里不断成长不断改变。最后一句话在转折中肯定，不论如何变化，最初在童年打下的基础是不会改变的。 |
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满分要素剖析
一、语言表达
本文的语言流畅，用比较平实的语言表达了自己的想法和意见，在句式上，作者用了很多强调句，多强调主语，后接定语从句，让文章不只是一些简单句的组合。
1、Others teach us about what defines “good” and “bad”, but we also begin to decide for ourselves and form a base of morality. 在这句话里what defines “good” and “bad”字面意思是定义好和坏的那些东西，也就是明辨是非。form 表示建立起，形成，morality是道德，品行的意思，其中一个解释是concern with the distinction between good and evil or right and wrong，也是基于好坏判断上的考虑，与前半句表达相似的意思。
2、All the information I’ve read about that time of life and the associated periods of foundational development states that these are the years that form who we are. 这是一个主语带超长定语的句子，简写为all the information states that…，在这里，state的意义是陈述，表明，是相对于says或者said来说更为正式的说法。最后的these are the years that…是一个强调主语的句式，这种结构在文中多次出现。
3、They can convince us we’re worthless, or they can teach us we deserve love and respect. Convince表示说服，deserve表示值得。
二、逻辑结构
文章从三个方面正面地说明童年是人的一生中很重要的一段时间，不论是对于我们的心理和思想还是我们的知识补充，都是打下基础的一段时期，这基础如同本性一样，以后很难发生本质性的改变。在文章的结尾稍作让步，体现了思维的完整性。全文是总分总的结构，开头对分论点进行了简单的概述，结尾仅在让步的基础上重述自己的观点，段落分工明确。
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