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In your country, is there more need for land to be left in its natural condition or is there more need for land to be developed for housing and industry? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In a populous country such as China, intense disputes frequently occur as to how to use land. The need for more land for housing and industry seems so reasonable that we are indeed losing more and more wild land. However, we should keep land in its natural condition rather than develop it for housing and industry.
First, ecological security outweighs economic need. There is literally no wild land, because land, with wildlife living on it, is a necessary part of ecological chain. For example, we used to consider swamp useless, but now wetland is classified as one of the most important natural resources. We tend to value a piece of land by its market price. However, the real value of land not only includes the market price, but also includes its contribution to ecological environment and social welfare. We often prioritize immediate needs rather than long-term and potential interests. However, the ignorance of these choices will catch up with us sooner or later. For instance, after suffering frequent sandstorms, China began to restore some farmland to its original condition, grassland or forestland. Unfortunately, it is often too late to realize the real value of the environment when ecological disasters happen.
Second, land is a kind of exhaustible resources; we should preserve land for future use. Though land does not extinct as wildlife does, the function of it may disappear, that is, we can not restore land that has been used for housing and industry to its natural condition. If we have used up our land for housing and industry, we in fact have deprived our offsprings of the chance of using it for other purposes. On the other hand, land in natural condition can be used for any purpose in the future. Therefore, if we leave enough land in its natural condition for our future generations, we will give them more choices and options.
In a word, although the need for land to develop housing and industry may be urgent and economically reasonable, we should be prudent with the use of land. To preserve land for future use is not a waste of resources; on the contrary, it is a protection of our environment and our future.
满分要素剖析
一、语言表达
1、To preserve land for future use is not a waste of resources; on the contrary, it is a protection of our environment and our future. 这句话结构比较复杂，前半句说了保护用地的重要性，后面用了一个on the contrary和分好，写出了本句子的后半段。我们在写作过程中要适当加入一些长难句，表现我们的语言功底，吸引ets考官的眼球。
2、First, ecological security outweighs economic need. 这个句子非常简单，但是有一个亮点词，即outweigh。这个词的意思是vt. 比…重(在重量上);比…重要;比…有价值。比如我们可以写One's merits outweigh one's short-comings。虽然这个词比较简单，但是用了以后非常高端大气，比more than这些俗词好多了，希望大家可以记住并使用。
3、The need for more land for housing and industry seems so reasonable that we are indeed losing more and more wild land.
二、逻辑结构
本文是正正正的大正型逻辑结构，每一个正文段都是从一个不同的方面支持了作者的主论点。文章的每一单小结构非常清晰，都是总分的形式。而且文章中句子也用的比较简单，很容易效仿。主要是思想展开比较深入，考虑问题全面。所以我们可以看到，在托福考试中，语言固然重要，但是思考的力量绝对不容小觑。
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