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Some people spend their entire lives in one place. Others move a number of times throughout their lives, looking for a better job, house, community, or even climate. Which do you prefer: saying in one place or moving in search of another place? Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion.
Even though I have lived in the same house, in the same neighborhood, in the same city my entire life. I know I would be happy living in a variety of places. Moving would expose me to new people, new weather, and new living styles.
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本段是第一句话引出了本文要讨论问题的背景，第二句话提出了作者的论点，即他喜欢住在不同的地方，第三句话进行了简单的原因阐述，引出了下文。 |
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Even if I were to move to another part of my city, I would encounter new people. Each neighborhood has a distinct personality. If I moved to that neighborhood, I would meet the shopkeepers and residents that shape that neighborhood’s distinct personality. I may even adopt some of their manners as my own so I could be recognized as part of that community.
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本段是一个总分的结构。首先第一句话即点明了主旨，不同的地方让我们与更多不同的人相遇。本段可以分为两个层次，第一个层次说我们可以认识很多新朋友，第二个部分说我们自己可以学习到更多不同的文化和礼仪，融入一个新的社会。 |
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本段是文章的第二段，也就是正文第一段，写了支持作者立场的第一个分论点。 |
If I want to encounter different weather patterns, I would have to move beyond my city. Where I live now, it is the same temperature all year round. I would like to go to a place where there are four seasons so I can experience really cold temperatures as well as the other seasons. I would like to walk in the snow and perhaps go skiing. I could learn winter sports if I lived in the north. Now of course, I live with my parents in their home. It is a one story house built around a courtyard where our family spends a lot of time. If I were to move, I would like to live in an apartment on a very high floor so I could see all the city around me. I could also meet my neighbors in the elevator and we could get together for coffee in my apartment.
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本段是一个总分的结构。首先第一句话即点明了主旨，不同的地方可以让我们感受到不同的天气。后面对全文进行了全文进行了收尾，写了作者现在的情况其实是和家人同住。 |
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本段是文章的第三段，也就是正文第二段，写了支持作者立场的第二个分论点。 |
The more I move, the more I would experience change. I would meet new people in every place I lived; I could move to countries with four seasons or even a continent like Antarctica which only has two. Wherever I lived, I would experience living in housing particular to that area. I would then be a citizen of the world, wouldn’t I? Could you call me a foreigner if I called every place my home?
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本段是一个总分的结构。首先第一句话即点明了主旨。后面对上文进行了概括和总结。然后用反问句升华全文，引发大家思考。 |
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满分因素剖析
一、语言表达
本文语句通顺，表达流畅，逻辑清晰。作者使用大量从句，尤其是时间状语从句和虚拟语气，使得文章的句子富于变化。在用词方面，作者十分下功夫，使用了很多高级词汇和固定搭配短语，使得文章表达很地道，彰显了作者的语言能力
1. Moving would expose me to new people, new weather, and new living styles.
此句中，用到了一个高级词汇expose，动词短语expose sb to sth的意思是“使某人暴露在...中”。在实际应用中，这个短语一般用被动的形式，即sb be exposed to sth，意思是“某人被某种环境包围”，可以用来形容作者周围的社会背景和一些客观现象。例如，Nowadays, we are often exposed to the phenomenon that...
2. Even if I were to move to another part of my city, I would encounter new people.
此句中，even if的意思是“即使”，引导让步状语从句，起到让步的作用。Even if引导的从句有一种对未来的假设，因此用到了虚拟虚拟语气。在虚拟语气中，没有系动词was，只能用were。
3. I may even adopt some of their manners as my own so I could be recognized as part of that community.
此句中，作者用到了很多英语写作中的固定搭配。动词短语“adopt sth as my own”的意思是“采纳某事作为自己的”，类似的用法还有“take sth as my own”。Be recognized的意思是“被认可，被接纳”。
4. The more I move, the more I would experience change.
此句中用到了一个英语作文中常用的结构，the more..., the more，意思是“越来越...”。在托福和
二、逻辑结构
文章采用的是正正正的结构，前三个正文段对全文论点进行了分析和支持，使得文章内容丰富，逻辑严谨。文章应用了设问、反问的修辞手法引发大家对问题进行思考，升华了全文。
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