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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television, newspapers, magazines, and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people such as public figures and celebrities. Use specific reasons and details to explain your opinion.
I think the media pays too much attention to the private lives of famous people. Television, newspaper magazines and web sites dig up all kinds of past bad actions and gossip. They say that these are true reflections of a person's character. This may be true if they occurred only a few years before, but some of these are things people did as teenagers. People in their forties are expected to explain something they did when they were fifteen, which is an impossible position, because everyone grows up and reflects on their foolish and childish actions from youth. If they killed someone, obviously that's more than a youthful mistake. Usually, though, these incidents involve experiments with drugs or being reckless in a car. They're not something that the public needs to know.
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The media loves to say that the public has a right to know. That's not true. We don't need to know if a movie star or politician has had an extramarital affair. That is something of concern only to the people involved. We do need to know if someone we're electing to public office has been involved in shady business deals, but we don't need to know if he/she defaulted on a loan twenty years ago.
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It seems the media digs up these facts without giving thoughtful consideration to what might happen. It has a profound effect on the celebrity's family, especially the children. A celebrity's good name and credibility may be ruined before he or she can prove that rumors are false. If a case goes to court, paying a lawyer could use up all their money. Even if it doesn't come to that, they may find their career ruined.
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本段是文章的第三段，也就是正文第二段，写了支持作者立场的第二个分论点。并进行了重申论点，使用反问的方法引人深思。 |
满分因素剖析：
一、语言表达
本文的语句通顺，逻辑清晰，语法错误较少。语言使用非常优美。在句式方面，作者大量使用定语从句，宾语从句，并列等长难句结构，文章句子又长又短，内容丰富，富于变化。在词汇方面，作者使用很多高级词汇和固定搭配短语，使得文章内容地道而高深，彰显了作者深厚的写作功底。
1. Usually, though, these incidents involve experiments with drugs or being reckless in a car.
此句中，though作为插入语出现在句子中，起到补充修饰的作用。在写作中，though和although都有“虽然”的意思，但although只能放在句首，而though可以放在句子的任何地方。形容词reckless的意思是“冒失的，不计后果的(多指行为方面)”，用在此处很贴切形象。
2. It seems the media digs up these facts without giving thoughtful consideration to what might happen.
此句中，出现经典句型，it seems that，意思是“看上去似乎...”，表现一种背景和推测，that后面接从句。动词短语dig up的意思是“发掘，挖掘”，同样的表达还有“look for”，不过dig up比look up更加深入仔细，用在这里很贴切。give consideration to的意思的“考虑过”，就相当于动词“consider”。What might happen是what引导的宾语从句，跟在介词that以后，做宾语。
3. We do need to know if someone we're electing to public office has been involved in shady business deals, but we don't need to know if he/she defaulted on a loan twenty years ago.
这句话是一个复合句嵌套加并列句的结构，两个分句之间用连词and连接。在第一句的谓语动词之前，有一个助动词“do”，其强调谓语的作用，使得作者的态度语气更加强烈。在前后两句话中，If都用来引导宾语从句，不再翻译成“如果”，而是翻译成“是否”，做谓语动词know的宾语。在第一个宾语从句中，we’re electing to public office前面省略that，做if引导的宾语从句中主语someone的定语，起修饰作用。另外，此句中还用到两个高级词汇shady和default。形容词shady的意思是“阴暗的”，引申义是“名声不好的”。动词default的意思是“拖欠，不履行”，短语default on loan的意思是“拖欠贷款”，这两个高级词汇都用的很准确，是举例论证更加生动。
二、逻辑结构
文章是正正的支持结构，结构比较简单，没有让步。文章中使用了反问的修辞手法，帮助作者强调本文观点，并使得读者深思，值得我们借鉴。
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