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Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. Others think that it is always better to have a teacher. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons to develop your essay.
Most of us can learn how to do something simple on our own with just a set of instructions. However, to learn about something more complex, it's always best to have a teacher.
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Teachers bring with them varied and useful backgrounds. They've been trained to teach individuals in different ways depending on their own personal didactic styles. For instance, some students learn better by discussing a topic. Others learn more by writing out an idea. Teachers can help students learn in the way that's best for each student. A textbook or a manual can only give you one way of learning something. Plus they're only as helpful as your ability to understand them. A good teacher can adapt her teaching to your needs.
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Teachers help you focus on what you're learning. If you're learning something by yourself, it’s easy to become distracted, and go on to other activities. Teachers keep your attention on the subject. They also approach a subject logically, taking it one step at a time. On your own, it's tempting to skip parts of the learning process you think you don’t need. That can hinder your ability to really understand the subject.
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Learning a subject on your own is a very narrow way of learning. You can only use the information you get from the textbook and process with your own understanding. With a teacher, you get the information in the written materials as well as the teacher's own knowledge of the topic. Teachers can also provide extra materials to broaden the scope of what you're learning.
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There's nothing wrong with studying on your own, and a learner can always benefit from some quiet study. For the best possible learning, though, a good teacher is the biggest help you can have.
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满分因素剖析:
一、语言表达
本文语言通顺,语义清晰,句子流畅,几乎没有语法错误。句型的多变是本文语言的一大特色。在复合句方面,作者使用了状语从句,it做形式主语的主语从句等从句。同时作者应用了大量非谓语动词充当句子中的各种成分,使句子精简干练而又语义丰富。另外,作者使用了some, other...,there be等经典句型,给文章锦上添花。
1. They've been trained to teach individuals in different ways depending on their own personal didactic styles.
本句中使用了非谓语动词结构。非谓语动词短语depending on their own personal didactic styles作为名词ways的定语,起修饰作用。本句还可以写成定语从句的形式:They've been trained to teach individuals in different ways which depend on their own personal didactic styles. 句中which引导的定语从句与上面的非谓语动词结构意思是相同的。大家可以记住这种用非谓语做定语的表达,实现其与定语从句间的转换,使表达多样化。
2. Teachers can also provide extra materials to broaden the scope of what you're learning.
此句中,动词短语broaden the scope的意思是“拓宽视野,使认识更多新的事物”,同样的表达还有broaden the horizon。在托福作文中,尤其是教育类题材,这种表达有着很广泛的应用,大家可以记住这两个此句,足可以秒杀大部分教育类作文。
3. There's nothing wrong with studying on your own, and a learner can always benefit from some quiet study.
此句中,there’s nothing wrong with是固定表达,意思是“。。。无可厚非”。在托福作文中,这种表达可以用在两个观点比较中。通常there’s nothing wrong在语义中含有让步作用,后面可以跟事物的一个方面或是一种观点,后面用来引出相反的观点。可以翻译成,“诚然,。。。是无可厚非的”
二、逻辑结构
本文采用正正反的结构,两个正面的支持段落构成了本文完全支持的大正基调,结构简单,逻辑清晰。最后一个段落从反面告诉我们,自学是不行的,还是需要老师教。
文章使用了许多的对比,写出了老师教课和自学的利弊,做了很详尽的利弊分析。逻辑清晰,内容充实。
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