今天的托福写作题目:离开家乡去大城市的好与坏。展开方法:(举例论证)主题句 + 解释拓展+ 反面例子 + 正面例子 + 扣题句
First, leaving hometown for big cities, especially metropolitans, enables people to have better job opportunities, thereby achieving success and happiness more easily.
段落解析:引出主题句,离开家乡去大城市会让人更幸福成功因为人们能有更好的工作机会。
Urban areas are equipped with almost all the modern amenities such as advanced infrastructures and optimum distribution of resources, attracting investors from domestic area and abroad to establish factories and companies. Therefore, with the availability of job positions offered by the domestic or multinational enterprises, people moving out of their hometown are more likely to land a decent job with satisfying salary to have a more comfortable life.
段落解析:解释拓展部分,通过因果关系的搭建,论证为什么在大城市能找到更多机会。
The superiority of moving out of one’s village or town can be confirmed by the example of my uncle. After studying drawing by himself, he became a freelancer artist, irregularly accepting commissions from local small-scale companies to make a living. Because of the instability and meager income from his job, my uncle suffered economic hardship for nearly five years until he went out of his town to Beijing.
段落解析:题目是对比比较类的题型,需要在文章中体现出对比关系。在这一部分举了个人的例子,提及了没离开家乡的时候,工作不稳定,生活拮据,以更好地突出后面部分即离开村子之后人们如何能更好地获得幸福和成功。
In the city with cultural and artistic atmosphere, most of the enterprises in Beijing pay much more attention to art and design, having awareness that visual image can contribute to brand building for the corporation; thus, numerous job positions in art and design field are more available. With his artistic talent, previous experience and efforts, my uncle was recruited by a first-rate design company. Now, with the highly-paying job, he not only enjoys desirable material life but also fulfills his potential in art field.
段落解析:正面的例子,体现出离开村子到了大城市,大城市的诸多机会使得人们能找到好工作,有着更高的收入,在既能享受到优质的物质生活的同时,也能更好地实现自己的个人能力,进而更成功、幸福。(PS,在文章的首段可以先定义一下成功和幸福的含义,所谓成功和幸福是来自物质和精神上的满足。因此在这里可以做到呼应。)
From my uncle’s case, it is evident that moving out of hometown means being exposed to more desirable opportunities which can bring more successful and happier life.
段落解析:最后段尾扣题,通过之前的例子体现出离开村子去到大城市使得人们能接触到更多的机会以达到成功和幸福。
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