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If you could ask a famous person one question, what would you ask? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
If I could ask a famous person one question, I would like to ask the world famous scientist Li Siguang if our city could build a statue or monument to honor him, because I think that he definitely deserves to be honored in some methods for his great achievements; and building a statue or monument to honor him is appropriate. Besides, to honor him will stimulate our children to model this famous scientist and push themselves to study hard. But I have to ask his permission.
The famous geologist, Zhao Siguang, had made great achievements in geology. One of his famous discoveries is that he renewed the continental drift theory in China. By applying his new theory into practical use, protectors have been exploring a lot of crude oil wells and precious mineral sites in China. These discoveries have been promoting our industries greatly and therefore made him famous both in our country and in the world. We need to honor him for these achievements.
There are a lot of ways to honor a famous scientist like Li Siguang, such as to establish an extra holiday, to name a street after his name besides building a statue or monument. However, establishing a new holiday will involve a series of legislative process and there is already a street that is called after his name in our city. The left choice is to build a statue or monument to honor him. Besides, he was born in our city. My city is his hometown. So, I think nothing can be more appropriate to honor him than to build a statue or monument.
After the statue or monument having been built, our later generations of the city can model him more easily. Our children are usually to know this famous geologist from books and magazines, or hearing his name from their teachers. It is a little more difficult for our children to adore him because all the stories about the famous people are seemed to be similar to one another. From building a statue or monument to honor him, children can look up to him anytime and know that he was born in the city and just standing over there. This will stimulate them to study hard and hope themselves to be as famous as him in the future.
Overall, if I had the opportunity to ask a famous person one question, I would really want to know if our city could build a statue or monument to honor Li Siguang. We really should honor him for his achievements and his potential positive effect upon our children. However, he is too modest a person. So, I have to ask him about this question and hope that he will say “yes” to me.
满分要素剖析：
一、 语言表达
本文用词和句式都比较简单。但在反复强调中很好地完成了题目要求，强调了文章主旨，值得水平一般的同学学习。
1. There are a lot of ways to honor a famous scientist like Li Siguang, such as to establish an extra holiday, to name a street after his name besides building a statue or monument. 这句话中name after的固定搭配，表示以…命名。besides在这里用作介词，表示除…之外还有。另外这里用such as列举部分事例，而for example比较偏向于列举出某一个并做详细说明。
2. It is a little more difficult for our children to adore him because all the stories about the famous people are seemed to be similar to one another. 表示崇拜，喜爱，这句话中用了adore，比一般的like情感更为强烈，解释为love intensely。be similar to表示相似。
3. By applying his new theory into practical use, protectors have been exploring a lot of crude oil wells and precious mineral sites in china. 这句话的后半句用了have been doing的现在完成进行时，表示一个过去开始，现在仍然持续的动作。前半句用了apply sth. into 表示运用，应用。
二、逻辑结构
作者的行文逻辑是按照题目中的问题思路来组建的，首先在全文开头回答题目中的问题，然后在正文中对每个回答进行进一步的解释。第一个分论点解释为什么选择李四光作为提问的名人，第二个分论点解释为什么要以建雕像的方式纪念李四光，最后说明雕像建立之后给人们带来的好处。尾段总结全文。全文的结构是总分总的结构。
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