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Your city has decided to build a statue or monument to honor a famous person in your country. Who would you choose? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice.
Famous entertainers and athletes have much influence over there. It is up to the entertainer to choose how they wield their power over the general public; some try their best to set a good example, while others exhibit depravity and malevolent behavior. Yao Ming, the famous basketball star, is an excellent example of the type of star who tries at time to look after his fans. If I could meet one famous athlete, I would choose to meet Yao Ming.
Yao Ming is very young to be a member of the esteemed National Basketball Association in North America. In his rookie year he has surpassed all expectations of those knowledgeable with the sport. His skill is attested to by the vast number of people interested in his abilities; in fact his popularity is so great that he has replaced O'Neal as starting center in the American All Star Game, which is no small feat. Yao Ming was also the number one rookie pick last year in the NBA. It would be inspiring to meet someone with such great abilities. He must have worked on his talent from a very young age to achieve such greatness.
Another reason why I would love to meet this great man is because he is an excellent ambassador for China. Yao Ming epitomizes Chinese spirit of hard working to achieve greatness. He in a sense brings China to the world. Although China has become an increasingly important part of international culture, our fair country is still relatively unknown to a large portion of the North American population. Yao Ming has titillated the interest of millions of young people around the world, with the unavoidable effect of bringing a focus to China and Chinese culture.
Finally, why I would like to meet Yao Ming is because he is a genuinely kind person. In spite of his fame and notoriety, in interviews you can see that he has remained a gracious and humble person. As an example of his kindness one must only look at his recent efforts in China to help raise money for SARS research. Therefore, I think that Yao Ming would be an excellent role model for all young people today, both in China and the rest of the world. He is a hard working, dedicated man, with a strong, noble character.
满分要素剖析：
一、 语言表达
文章的语汇十分丰富，有很多值得收集和积累的高级词汇，比如在描述人的品德性格时必要的形容词，还有实用的动词词汇。另外还有一些替代结构，没有摆脱重复用词的尴尬。
1. It is up to the entertainer to choose how they wield their power over the general public; some try their best to set a good example, while others exhibit depravity and malevolent behavior. 取决于用be up to，it’s up to you这取决于你，另外还有depend也有表示相似意思的情况，大家可以自己做对比，比如that depends那要看情况。Wield使用，运用，一般用于wield power and authority or an axe。While连接两个形成对比的句子，set a good example和exhibit depravity and malevolent behavior,后面这个结构里有两个不常见的高级词汇，表示恶毒的malevolent和表示腐败堕落的depravity，关于展示，也用了两个不同的表达，一个是set example的固定搭配，树立模范，一个是exhibit，展示，表示。注意学习句中的词汇和结构的灵活使用。
2. Yao Ming epitomizes Chinese spirit of hard working to achieve greatness. He in a sense brings China to the world. 在这句话中，epitomize相当于be a typical example of,表示他是中国自强不息的缩影和代表，也有摘要，概括的意思。in a sense,表示在某种程度上，在一定意义上，是一个限定程度的短语。
3. In spite of his fame and notoriety, in interviews you can see that he has remained a gracious and humble person. 这个句子里有很多可以收集起来的词汇，比如形容词gracious和humble，分别表示亲切和谦逊，还有名词fame和notoriety，分别表示名声和恶名。另外in spite of，表示尽管，不管，相似的结构还有despite引导的让步状语从句。
二、 逻辑结构
文章从三个正面说明了自己选择姚明的理由，一个是姚明在事业上的努力和成功，一个是他作为宣传中国大使的社会角色，一个是从他在公众面前表现出来的个人品格出发，力证姚明代表了中国人的努力勤奋和谦逊温和，再加上他连接中国与世界的社会角色，是最合适的最合理的人选，条理清晰。
全文选用的是总分的结构，每个分论点下也是总分的形式，通常建议结尾的时候能有一个总结全文和再述观点的段落，会显得结构更完整。
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