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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Telephones and email have made communication between people less personal. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
At first glance, this statement may sound plausible because except from personal contact, every other forms of communication, including telephones and emails, are indirect ways of communication. But shall we reach the conclusion that telephones and email have made communication between people less personal? To answer this question, we should look at the following points:
First, telephone and email are more efficient ways of communication. Telephones and email are becoming more and more important for us today. We use telephones for conversations to our friends and family; we use email to transfer important information and documents, even photo and multi-media files. With a phone, we can order services and make enquires regarding a service without physically present in the place, this will save us so much time and energy. In time of emergencies, when it is impossible for us to physically go to a police station or a hospital, we can simply call 911, a emergency vehicle will come to us in ten minutes. Imagine how hard it will be for us if we do not have access to a telephone under emergency situations.
Second, telephones and email increase the chances that people communicate. Although face-to- face personal contact is more close and intimate than making phone calls or sending emails, we actually do not have much time to visit each other. Furthermore, people have their own private life. Sometimes they do not want to be disturbed by visitors. A phone call or an email message is always the most proper and courteous way to make contact with people, and are not restrained by time or occasions. For example, during the Chinese New Years, more and more people make phone calls to our friends and folks, or send electronic cards through email, wishing them a happy new year, instead of actually travel to their friends’ house to make a visit.
In conclusion, telephones and email are convenient ways to communicate and can actually increase the communication between people. They maybe are less personal, but they are surely more effective means of communication.
满分要素剖析：
一、 语言表达
本文的语言使用非常优美，长难句比较多，而且词汇也用的地道而高深。这里不是要求大家都通篇使用长难句，而是说我们遣词造句的功底可以通过适当的长句子，和夹杂的比较高深的词汇显示出来，并用多变的句式让考官读的津津有味
1. A phone call or an email message is always the most proper and courteous way to make contact with people, and are not restrained by time or occasions. 用proper和courteous表示打电话是一种最合适最有礼貌的联系他人的方式，与上下文所提到的面对面的直接交流形成对比。Make contact with其实与直接用contact意思一样，但是会形成流动语汇的印象。restrain表示被时间或者其他条件限制。
2. They maybe are less personal, but they are surely more effective means of communication.
在这句话里，maybe和surely两个语气副词的使用形成一种对比的效果，加强了作者肯定的立场。值得借鉴的是mean的用法，在这里是way的同义词，大家可以交替使用。
3. In time of emergencies, when it is impossible for us to physically go to a police station or a hospital, we can simply call 911, a emergency vehicle will come to us in ten minutes. Imagine how hard it will be for us if we do not have access to a telephone under emergency situations. 这两句里面作者用in time of emergency和under emergency situations来表示在紧急的情况下，是完全两种方式指向同一种意义的例子，避开了重复的尴尬。have access to既表达通向某处的途径，在这里也是指接近某物，使用某物的途径，实际上，文中的这种用法是很地道的。
二、 逻辑结构
文章立足于电话和电邮更好的角度，从两个分论点的角度出发，通过对比面对面的联系方式和电话邮件的联系方式证明自己的论点，即电话与邮件具有更大的便利性和灵活性。在分论点的讨论中，作者也有让步来列举面对面的交流方式具有的优势，对比使得文章的讨论逻辑更加完整。
开篇仅交代背景，然后马上进入讨论，作者在开头并没有明确提出自己的论点，采用的是先讨论后总结的分总的结构，以退为进，增加了客观性，而不是先入为主的论证方式。
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