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Some people prefer to plan activities for their free time very carefully. Others choose not to make any plans at all for their free time. Compare the benefits of planning free-time activities with the benefits of not making plans. Which do you prefer―planning or not planning for your leisure time? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your choice.
I think that free time is a precious thing. When we’re working hard, it’s nice to imagine what we’ll do when we have the time. We juggle one idea with another, trying to decide what best suits our monetary situation and our amount of free time. After all, anticipating free time is part of the pleasure.
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本段是一个分总的结构。第一句就亮出作者对free time的态度，是precious，也就是正态度的。之后对其美妙之处进行了解释。最后一句话是本文主旨。 |
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It’s good to plan what we’re going to do with our free time. That way we won’t waste any of it trying to make last minute choices. It’s so easy to just sit around and daydream about possibilities. If we decide ahead of time, we can get started in plenty of time, and we can get the most benefit out of our time. For instance, if we’re going on a camping trip, we can get all our supplies ready to go. Or if we’re going to a concert, we can find out the time and how long the drive is. Also, if we plan what we’re going to do with our free time, we can invite others to join us ahead of time. If we wait until the last minute, our friends may have already made other plans.
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On the other hand, it’s also fun to do things spontaneously. We can just leave the house and walk around and see what looks fun at that moment. Often, this is how we discover places we never knew existed off the beaten trail of our experiences. We might end up doing something we never thought we’d try. We might just happen to find ourselves outside a new bookstore or restaurant and go in on a whim.
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It’s nice if we can have the best of both worlds. We can plan our free time activities for one day of the weekend, and let the other day unfold spontaneously. The excitement and leisure of free time can be expressed in so many ways.
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满分要素剖析
一、语言表达
1. We juggle one idea with another, trying to decide what best suits our monetary situation and our amount of free time. juggle这里意为玩耍，意思即为把这件事轻松对待，总是变来变去。前面是主句，后面是现在分词作伴随状语。这样的写法相比于那种并列句显得更加高级而且简练了，原形是We juggle one idea with another and we try to decide what best suits our monetary situation and our amount of free time.
2. After all, anticipating free time is part of the pleasure.这句话的精彩之处在于主语是动名词形式，本文多用分词是一大亮点，值得注意的是，动名词与分词的结构是一样的，但是意义差别很大，分词强调动作，而动名词强调名词也就是说动名词表示“这件事”，那么这句话就是提前预知如何分配空余时间的这件事是非常愉快的。但如果这句话用同等的意思表达换一种分词的方式即为The part of the pleasure in life is anticipating free time.
3. It’s good to plan what we’re going to do with our free time.这句话又是It作为形式主语，原型是To plan what we’re going to do with our free time is good.由于主语太长只能放在后面表达了。在不定式作主语里面又有一个小的状语从句what we’re going to do with our free time。
4. It’s so easy to just sit around and daydream about possibilities. 此句还是it做形式主语，原型是To just sit around and daydream about possibilities is so easy.其中这句话的细节描写也非常值得鉴赏，sit around and daydream每天做白日梦，这样的写法让读者脑海中瞬间有了一幅懒散的画面，由于之前有动作的出现sit around，显得很生动。
5. Also, if we plan what we’re going to do with our free time, we can invite others to join us ahead of time. If we wait until the last minute, our friends may have already made other plans.这两句话都是举例子，使用了if的真实条件句中的主情从现。
6. On the other hand, it’s also fun to do things spontaneously. It形式主语代替不定式To do things spontaneously is also fun. 由于主语较长，避免头重脚轻，所以放在后面表达。
7. Often, this is how we discover places we never knew existed off the beaten trail of our experiences. We might end up doing something we never thought we’d try.主语是This，系动词is，how we discover places是表语从句，之后的we never knew existed off the beaten trail of our experiences是修饰places的定语从句。引导词that省略的原因是它在定语从句中作宾语。之后的existed off the beaten trail of our experiences是个过去分词作定语修饰之前的places。值得注意的是experiences这里是可数名词，表示经历，而意为经验就是不可数的了。之后的might end up是情态动词表推测，might在这里面是语气最委婉的，推测程度最弱。这里也体现了作者的不确定性。we never thought we’d try是个定语从句修饰something，省略了引导词that。而we’d try是thought的宾语从句。
二、逻辑结构
本文逻辑结构清晰，架框整齐，采用结构为总分分总的结构。首先第一段亮出作者对free time的态度，是非常喜欢的。第二段着重讲plan的优点，后面罗列了一堆例子。第三段写的是no plans in free time的优点，因为有时一切都是即兴的又那么的美好和放松。最后一段总结，结合第二段和第三段谈到的利用free time的方式，因为各有各的优势，最后一句话精辟概括The excitement and leisure of free time can be expressed in so many ways.
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