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A foreign visitor has only one day to spend in your country. Where should this visitor go on that day? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice
If a foreign visitor has only one day to spend in my country - China, I will recommend him to live in an average Chinese family for that special day. There is no denying that the one-day experience with an average Chinese family will be invaluable for his life and future career, if given a chance to work or live in China in the foreseeable future!
As is known to all, to live with an average Chinese family for only one day, the foreign visitor could not get an overall picture of the average Chinese's life style and their culture; but in another way, even at the very beginning of being enthusiastically welcomed at the threshold of the house, he must be overwhelmed by the enthusiasm delivered by Chinese people who are famous for their hospitality; so that he is given a vivid lesson about the characteristics of the Chinese people. Of course, hospitality is merely one of the virtues Chinese people possess, but it is of vital importance to get familiar with the natives, to read the thoughts of the natives through their manners, or even their gestures, and finally be emerged into the life of the native Chinese more harmoniously than those who do not have such an experience!
Besides, to live with an average Chinese family, a foreigner will get first-hand information about the situation of the common Chinese people's the life quality, their main expenses, and their hobbies in their spare time and so on. This first-hand information is of preliminary importance if he wants to get an insider’s view of this country.
The third reason is that it is the best way for a foreigner to confirm whether he has read or heard in his own country is true or not is to look into the average Chinese people's life in person. If a foreigner is also a well-informed person, he must be buried with bulks of information all shouting about the so-called "insider's view" about the circumstances of the life of the Chinese people in today's China; and if he is a critical reader, he should not swallow all that without even asking "is that true?" Accordingly, I would say to the foreigner that to live with an average Chinese family will deserve all your endeavor and it is the perfect way to spend your one-day tour in China!
满分要素剖析：
一、 语言表达
本文的语言特色在于长难句的使用和准确严谨的表达。除了必不可少的提示文章结构的逻辑连接词，还有形形色色的形容词，副词的使用，在很多方面限定了程度，距离等一些散漫的概念，或者在某一句话里提示了不同的语气氛围，比如仅仅，当然等。同时我们也看到文中有很多新的词语的使用替代了我们常用的陈旧的词汇，出现在那些位置上，大家可以找出来以便借鉴。
1. There is no denying that the one-day experience with an average Chinese family will be invaluable for his life and future career, if given a chance to work or live in China in the foreseeable future! 开句的there is no denying that 句型表示毫无疑问，可以与there is no doubt that交换使用，避免重复。in the foreseeable future,表示在不远的将来，比去掉foreseeable的修饰，只用future更有实际意义。
2. Of course, hospitality is merely one of the virtues Chinese people possess, but it is of vital importance to get familiar with the natives, to read the thoughts of the natives through their manners, or even their gestures, and finally be emerged into the life of the native Chinese more harmoniously than those who do not have such an experience! 首先用of course表达肯定的语气，接着用merely表示仅仅，替代了only。Possess sth.可以表示某种硬件物质的所有权，也可以表示具有某种软件条件，比如品德，知识，技能等。Be of vital importance，用vital修饰importance加深了重要性的程度，be of+名词相当于be+相应的形容词，大家在无法找到替代词汇的情况下，可以灵活地折腾同一个词汇的不同形式来做一些改变。
3. If a foreigner is also a well-informed person, he must be buried with bulks of information all shouting about the so-called "insider's view" about the circumstances of the life of the Chinese people in today's China; and if he is a critical reader, he should not swallow all that without even asking "is that true?" 表示大批的，大量的信息用bulk代替lots of这种泛泛的表达词。Well-informed和so-called这种复合形容词是比较灵活的组词，也有一些比较固定的常用的搭配大家平时可以多积累，是最直接最好用的形容词。
二、 逻辑结构
本文是从正面，分三个方面论证了自己的观点，说明自己选择的优势和合理性。严格来说，第一个分论点，也就是第一个理由，在某种程度上引领了下两个分论点。第一个分论点是说外国人能够从中国家庭里感受平常中国人民的生活和个性，接着第二个分论点——了解中国第一手信息，和第三个分论点——考察和纠正已知信息，是第一个分论点基础上的延伸。
本文采用的是总分总的结构，但是由于收尾和第三个分论点的展开合二为一，因此结尾比较仓促，每个分论点的展开也是以总分的形式进行的。
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