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Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
The Internet provides people with a lot of information, but is this information valuable, or so much information creates problems for us? In my point of view, everything has two sides, and the value of the Internet far outweighs the disadvantages it brings to us.
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The Internet has been beneficial to people around the globe. My view is a commonsensical one, based on the fact that the Web is a vast storehouse of information and opinion, which can be scientific, literary, political, sporting or sexual. Anyone with access to a computer and a dialup connection can unlock the door and trawl through its offerings.
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本段是一个总分的结构。开头提出论点，即网络带给人们极大的便利。后面对论点进行了进一步解释，即网络提供给人们多样的，数量巨大的信息。 |
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The Internet can be used as a broad base of knowledge that contributes to the educational system. Students and teachers benefit from the use of the Internet, as well as administrators and others outside of formal education. Students benefit because the Internet provides a resource to supplemental information for any subject. Educators benefit because the Internet provides a vast knowledge base to prepare for topics. People are not only learning from the Internet, they are contributing and sharing knowledge through networked communities. The Internet is the advancement of education for all its users.
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总分的结构，开头提出论点，即网络是一个知识宝库。后面对论点进行了进一步解释，对于教育系统里的学生，老师们来说，网络上的信息会让他们突破书本的局限，学到更多，另一方面，网络的分享性也让大家受益。 |
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Internet can deliver better customer services to people. The Internet is changing the way we do business. Using Internet broadcasting, we are able to target the right audience, prepare and present a technical presentation on a popular topic, interact with new customers, and collect hundreds of highly qualified leads. As Internet companies continue to find innovative ways to leverage the capabilities of the Internet for businesses, the more we will learn how to provide optimal solutions for customers, which in turn, will greatly benefit people.
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总分的结构，开头提出论点，即网络能给消费者提供更好的服务。紧接着解释，网络正在改变商业交易的方式。然后列举一系列的变化来例证，并且说明交易双方都会从这些变化里得到好处。 |
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The Internet today is a way to transfer and share information. On the whole, it is a benefit to individuals of all kinds. We do have problems surrounding the Internet that need to be solved, but as with all new technologies there are debates and opinions. Since the Internet technology is spreading, it will soon become as popular as all other forms of communication. If you have not tried it, do so.
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首句承接上文，总结因特网在现在是一种分享信息的方式。从总体上来说，人们都从中获益良多。接着指出围绕网络，的确存在一些问题和争议，但是我们要以积极的心态去接纳，去充分利用网络。最后一句，鼓励人们去尝试，去使用网络。 |
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一、 语言表达
本文在语言表达上如鱼得水，灵活性，多样性和稳定性共存，展现了作者对于各种词汇和语句的全面了解和掌握。特别体现在词汇的多样性上，在文中有多处是用不同的方式，结构表达出同一个意思的例子，这篇文章非常值得大家细细品味。
In my point of view, everything has its two sides, and the value of the Internet far outweighs the disadvantages it brings to us. 表达自己的观点，这里用了in my point of view, 接着是一句地道的everything has its two sides，类似于every coin has two sides的俗语，强调事物的两面性。Outweigh超过，在做两者的比较时经常拿来表示一方超过另一方。
Anyone with access to a computer and a dialup connection can unlock the door and trawl through its offerings. access to字面意思表示通往…的途径，接近…的机会，一般像句中那样，引申为有权利使用。Trawl through表示搜索，搜寻，与search through意思相近。
Using Internet broadcasting, we are able to target the right audience, prepare and present a technical presentation on a popular topic, interact with new customers, and collect hundreds of highly qualified leads.这句话里包含了一连串的动作，因此注意这些动词的使用：target瞄准，present呈现，表现，interact with与…交流，来往，collect收集。
As Internet companies continue to find innovative ways to leverage the capabilities of the Internet for businesses, the more we will learn how to provide optimal solutions for customers, which in turn, will greatly benefit people. Leverage发挥杠杆作用，也就是平衡的意思，与balance所要传达的意义相近。Optimal最佳的，最优的。in turn 表示反过来，作为回报。
二、 逻辑结构
文章开篇表明立场，网络的积极作用远远大于其消极作用，然后从三个方面论证网络的积极作用，即网络带给人极大的便利;对于学生们来说，网络是又一个学习的宝库;对于买卖交易来说，不论是买方还是卖方都会得到好处。实际上，第一个论点有总领其它分论点的意义，关于教育行业和商业的讨论，都是在第一个论点的基础上代入实际情况的讨论，是延伸和补充。
最后一个段落提及消极作用，但是马上转折，提出全文的总论点，表明自己的立场：请接纳网络，好好利用它。
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