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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising can tell you a lot about a country. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays some may hold the opinion that advertising can tell you a lot about a country. As far as I am concerned, I agree with this statement. My arguments for this point are listed as follows.
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One of the primary causes is that advertising is always a reflection of a country’s culture and customs. Advertising varies from country to country, depending on the country's particular conventions. For example, a Japanese advertisement may feature a Japanese lady with traditional kimono, while an American advertisement may feature a western cowboy with a hat and ride a horse. Through advertisement, we can have a general understanding of what people from other countries look like, what they wear during their daily life, what they eat, what kind of transportation they use, and what they do during their spare times. We can always learn different cultures of different countries through these culture specific advertisements.
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本段是一个总分的结构。开头提出论点，即广告能反映一个国家的文化和风俗。后面对论点进行了进一步解释，每个国家的广告是根据国家的不同传统产生不同的。接着举例日本，美国两个国家的广告可能会出现什么样的带有民族特征的画面。最后解释和总结，我们可以通过广告来了解不同国家的生活和文化。 |
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A further more subtle point we must consider is that we can understand a country by its products. When we see a Toyota or a SONY advertisement on TV, we realize that Japanese people see quality as a vital aspect of their products, and we know that how these people are always trying their best in high technology development, and ensure the best quality in their products. When we have gained a deeper understanding of a product, we can also gain a deeper understanding of that country and people.
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总分的结构，开头提出论点，即产品的广告让我们窥见这背后的国家和民族性格。举例日本的产品广告会让人们看到日本对于产品质量和高科技的不断追求。最后总结，照应段落开头。 |
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What is more, when we become curious about the culture and customs of a country through advertisement, we are willing to spend more time on reading about the country, explore more deeply about it, and even someday travel to a country we like to visit. All these might have started with a small advertisement on TV! Is that amazing?
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总分的结构，开头提出论点，即广告会引起人们对于某个地区和国家的风俗文化的兴趣，从而更多地产生亲身了解那块土地的愿望。最后一句话感叹广告的神奇之处。 |
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In short, advertising can really tell you a lot about a country's culture and customs.
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满分要素剖析：
一、 语言表达
本文的语言得体，用词十分地道并且恰当，没有简单词汇或者复杂词汇泛滥的极端现象，句型多样，并且在某些段落用排比，反问等手法增强语气氛围，让文章读起来更生动，具有互动性。
1. Advertising varies from country to country, depending on the country's particular conventions. 这句话中Vary from代替be different from等泛滥的词组，表示变化的不同，并且更强调多样性，而不只是相互间的区别。后半句是动词的现在分词做伴随状语，这些合并简单句的手法让文章读起来更有连续性。
2. For example, a Japanese advertisement may feature a Japanese lady with traditional kimono, while an American advertisement may feature a western cowboy with a hat and ride a horse. 表示特点，特性，feature既可以用做名词也可以用做动词。While做并列连词，表对照关系，连词的准确选用让句子之间的逻辑关系清楚显现。
3. Through advertisement, we can have a general understanding of what people from other countries look like, what they wear during their daily life, what they eat, what kind of transportation they use, and what they do during their spare times. 这句话后半段连续用了五个what+正常语序的结构充当of的介词宾语，在这里简单句的排比并没有影响到语义的连续性，并且比较全面地列举出人们通过广告可以了解的东西，丰富内容，增强了语气。“了解”在这里用have a understanding of, 并且用general做修饰，表示广泛地了解，和后面列举出的丰富的内容相照应。
4. What is more, when we become curious about the culture and customs of a country through advertisement, we are willing to spend more time on reading about the country, explore more deeply about it, and even someday travel to a country we like to visit. 句首先用连接词what’s more连接上下文，完整文章的逻辑。后面be willing to do+几个简单句摊开，共用主语和谓语，并且递进地表达广告从引起更多的关注，到人们会产生想去亲自探望的愿望。
二、 逻辑结构
作者以递进的方式从三个方面，正面地论证了总论点。首先提出广告是不同国家文化风情的体现，然后进一步说明，我们可以从广告中了解这个国家的性格，最后，当广告对我们的感官产生了刺激，我们就会产生亲自去见一见这个地方的愿望，从总论点：广告是一个国家的缩影，延伸到人们通过广告这个窗口能得到的好处，纵深地支撑了自己的论点。
文中每个段落之间都有逻辑连接词严密地整理段落之间的关系，因此，本文的逻辑架构比较严谨。
全文的结构是属于总分总的结构，每个段落也以总分的段落来组织。
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