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It is generally agreed that society benefits from the work of its members. Compare the contributions of artists to society with the contributions of scientists to society. Which type of contribution do you think is valued more by your society? Give specific reasons to support your answer.
Artists and scientists both make valuable contributions to our society. It may seem sometimes that artists are more important. That’s because those artists who are famous make a lot of money. However, they are relatively few. At the end of the day, scientists are more valued. They get more respect from society for the work they do.
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Artists reflect their times and their culture. A painter or a writer shows us in pictures and words a greater feeling or thought shared by many people. They record our culture for future generations. Actors and other performers, like singers and dancers, entertain us. Artists also help keep their societies mentally and emotionally healthy. For example, children that participate in the arts do better in their other studies. Art of all types is necessary to the human spirit.
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The contributions scientists make to society are more obvious. They include cars, computers appliances, movies phones and other miracles of the modern world . All of these come from the ideas and hard work of scientists. Because of scientific discoveries, we’re living longer and healthier lives. Scientists also contribute to the arts. Movies are the result of technology, a part of science. So are television, radio, and the recording of music on CDs.
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Generally, scientists don’t make as much money as famous artists like film stars, opera singers or successful painters. However, our society gives them more respect, and they generally make a good living. Scientists are considered to be serious professionals, while artists are sometimes viewed erratic, uncontrollable people. Overall, scientists are more valued in society.
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一. 语言表达
本文用的是一种典型的辩论对称式结构。第一段：比较两个观点，引出题目，概括出自己的观点。第二段：一方观点。第三段：另一方观点。第四段：再次总结自己的观点，认为双方都有道理，但自己更倾向哪一方。结构工整，逻辑清晰明了，论述全面。
1. At the end of the day, scientists are more valued. They get more respect from society for the work they do. 此句中at the end of the day 的用法非常地道，表示考虑到所有情况后引出最重要的事实，可翻译为最终，到头来。第二句中 somebody get something from somewhere for some reason 用的很巧妙，大家以后写文章的时候可以套用。
2. Artists reflect their times and their culture. 此句短小精悍，高度总结了artists 的价值。值得鉴赏。
3. Movies are the result of technology, a part of science. So are television, radio, and the recording of music on CDs. 英文中为了避免和前一句话的内容重复，习惯用用so引导的倒装句。固定结构有so + be(助动词，情态动词)+主语。助动词或情态动词的形式要和之后的主语保持一直。
4. However, our society gives them more respect, and they generally make a good living. 这是原文最后一段中的第二句话，作者用一个however承上启下，话锋一转说明了虽然科学家赚的钱并不是最多的，但他们赢得的是更多的尊重。
二. 逻辑结构
文章采用的让步型论述结构，开始支持了艺术家的一些贡献，欲扬先抑，然后再写了科学家对人类的贡献和重要性，逻辑通顺，结构清晰。文章每一个段落内都是总分结构，非常中规中矩，而且举了一些生活中的例子，使得论证逻辑严谨，内容丰富。
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