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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future. Use reasons and specific examples to support our answer.
Some people argue that most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time can later become valuable experiences. I cannot agree with them more. There are numerous reasons why I hold confidence on this opinion, and I would explore only a few primary ones here.
Difficulties are beneficial to our personal growth. In the course of our life, we are going to face numerous difficulties and obstacles, and each difficulty will help us grow up, and become a valuable lesson for the future. A toddler fells off the ground for many times before he knows how to walk, and a child learns how to swim after he drinks water in the swimming pool. In addition, only after we experienced failures, we know the value of success. We will never appreciate anything that comes so easy. Difficulties can make us feel stronger and be more confident for the future obstacles.
Furthermore, difficulties in our work can help us gain more experience and knowledge. Most of the times we can gain knowledge and experiences faster through experiencing difficulties in our life and trying to find a solutions to the perplexities that we face. There is a famous saying, no pain, no gain. For example, when we take on a new job that we do not have much experience in, the first few weeks can be extremely painful and we may feel enormous pressure and difficulties. And we will try our best to adjust, to learn and to think, how to do this job better. The more difficulties we feel, the harder we try to acquire the skills and knowledge to overcome it. Learning and this stage is extremely efficient and our problem-solving skills well increase. After we overcome more and more problems, we can become an experienced worker in this field and will be able to take on more challenges. We will never fear that we will face the same kind of problem again. This means that we have accumulated valuable experiences for the future.
In a word, a difficult experience is a gift that life gives us. We should appreciate it and take it as a precious opportunity to gain knowledge and experience about our study, work and life.
段落此段结构直进入总结:逆境是上天给我们的礼物。接着进一步延伸:我们应该珍惜和抓住这些机会来锻炼自己,承受成长的考验。
此段功能本段是文章的尾段,照应开头,总结全文,并重新陈述了作者立
满分要素剖析:
一、 语言表达
本文语言优美流畅,有很多的动词短语和连接词组可以借鉴,比如furthermore, in addition, in a word等段落之间,句子之间的过渡连接词,让文章更有条理。用词多样,在句式上常用状语从句前置,在句式的多样性上也起到了很好的调节。
1. I cannot agree with them more. 本句是一个非常地道的表达,cannot agree more用来表明作者的立场,对于某一方非常支持。除了这个搭配之外,文中还有另外一些优秀的动词词组和短语,比如:be beneficial to, take on a new job/challenge, fall off等等,这在本文中是一大亮点。
2. There are numerous reasons why I hold confidence on this opinion, and I would explore only a few primary ones here. 本句中含有the reason why从句,引出对于作者观点的讨论,另外,hold confidence on用来表达对某个观点的支持,避免了和agree等用词的重复;explore用来代替discuss等一些使用频率较高的词汇,让人眼前一新。
3. The more difficulties we feel, the harder we try to acquire the skills and knowledge to overcome it. 这是the+比较级,the+比较级句式的运用,表示越…越…的意义,前一句作为条件状语从句主谓用正常语序,而后面的主句则正常和倒装语序皆可,本句里采用的是正常语序。
4. After we overcome more and more problems, we can become an experienced worker in this field and will be able to take on more challenges. 这是一个状语从句前置的句式,more and more表达的意义与第三句中的两个the+比较级连用的意义相似,这里表示越来越多的意思,而can 和 be able to的分别使用避免了词汇单一的情况。
二、 逻辑结构
本文完全从正面来进行观点论证,用两个分论点来对自己的立场说明支撑,非常清晰明了。
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