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What do you want most in a friend - someone who is intelligent, or someone who has a sense of humor, or someone who is reliable? Which one of these characteristics is most important to you? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your choice.
Friends are very important in everyone's life. But there are different types of friends: some of them are very intelligent, some have a good sense of humor and some are reliable. What I want most is the friend who has a good sense of humor.
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首段，第一句话简单开题，第二句话继续拓展背景，举出朋友的不同类型，第三句话提出自己的观点——想要具有幽默感的朋友。 |
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首段为文章提供了背景，陈述了作者论点，并进行了简单的分析。 |
Humor is a very important character of a person, because a person who is humorous can always bring you happiness. I have a friend, who is not very intelligent and reliable, but he is one of my best friends, just because he has a good sense of humor. Whenever you call him, talk with him, he always tells you some funny jokes that make you laughing. Even though you are in a very bad mood, he can make you laugh and forget the sad things. A friend with a good sense of humor is very optimistic; they can make your world full of light.
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本段是一个总分总的结构。开头提出论点，即幽默感是一项很重要的人格魅力。首先，幽默的人给人带来正能量，接着举例说明自己的朋友因为具有这样的人格魅力，虽然其他方面不是特别突出，但是带给作者很多欢乐，赶走很多阴霾，最后总结幽默感带给人乐观的生活态度，感染到自己也觉得世界有光。 |
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本段是文章第二段，提出了正文的第一个支持论点，幽默给人正能量。 |
If a person doesn't have a sense of humor at all, that's really bad. No matter how intelligent he is, no matter how reliable he is, he will never bring you happiness, although he can help you solve a few problems, because his world is without laughter. In my class there is a very smart guy, but because of his lack of humor, we don't like to play with him, although it seems that he knows everything.
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总分的结构，从反面来说明没有幽默感的人如何得不到大家的喜爱。首先提出没有幽默感，无论多么优秀的人，都无法让旁人感到快乐，接下来依然举自己身边的例子来支撑这个分论点。 |
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本段是文章第三段，提出了正文的第二个支持论点，从相反的方面重复了第二段的分论点，加强攻势。 |
Friend plays a very significant role in everyone's life. But humor is the most important character in a friend, because humorous friends make you happy and see the world optimistically. They make your world full of hope, and full of laughter.
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本段依然是总分的结构，强调朋友是每个人生活中重要的角色，而幽默感能带给人快乐的心情和乐观的态度，给大家带来希望和欢笑。 |
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满分要素剖析：
一、 语言表达
本文尽管有些用词和表达比较重复，但是语言流畅简单，定语从句和状语从句遍地开花，用来定格种类和表达情绪很有效率。句子内或者句子之间连接词的适当使用也是文章流畅的原因之一。
1. What I want most is the friend who has a good sense of humor. What从句做主语，同时还有who定语从句让句式丰富，句子内容丰满，表明自己的态度和选择。
2. In my class there is a very smart guy, but because of his lack of humor, we don't like to play with him, although it seems that he knows everything. 这个句子实际上是三个简单地部分组成的，句子中使用的but，because of 和although将三个部分很好地衔接起来，表达转折，解释缘由，另外lack of和it seems that句式的使用也是很好的表达。
3. Whenever you call him, talk with him, he always tells you some funny jokes that make you laughing. 文中多处使用whenever，no matter how的状语从句，让文章不是停留在简单句的拼接，同时让步状语从句还能加强作者对于幽默感重视的语气。
二、 逻辑结构
本文采用的是正反论证方式，首先从正方说明有幽默感的人能给他人的生活带来阳光，然后从反方说明，没有幽默感，就算学识能力超出常人，也很难有贴心的朋友，首尾自然段呼应并亮出立场，强调自己看重幽默的人格。这种正反翻来覆去论证的方式不论是论点还是论据都很单一和重复，但是贵在有比较全面的论证。
文章采用的是总分总的结构，开头和结尾相互呼应，表达论点，中间摊开分论点论据，每一段则是采用总分的形式，先提出分论点，再举例论证。
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