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Is it more important to be able to work with a group of people on a team or to work independently? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
While some people emphasize the great importance of cooperation, others argue that the significance of individual competition should not be rejected or neglected. To examine whether one is more important than the other, we have to look carefully into further details.
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首段，第一句话提出背景，介绍团队合作和独立工作两种观点，第二句话过渡，展开下文的讨论。 |
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There are circumstances where the ability to work with group is much more important than that to work independently. More often than not, in most fields, a team can achieve much more extensive scope than an individual can, because one has less strength than many. In team-played sports, such as foot-ball, basket-ball; volley-ball etc., teamwork is often highly valued and is of essence. To get a goal or make a point, team members have to cooperate with each other, nobody could achieve without other’s help. Although individual competence is a must, too much accent on his personal ability will lead him even the whole team to a disaster.
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本段是一个总分的结构。开头提出论点，即在某些情况下，团队合作的重要性会超过个人表现，帮助我们取得更好的结果。接着举例足球等团队运动，说明无人能取代一整个团队的默契。 |
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On the other hand, there also are inverse circumstances. In vital decision making, for example, one have to make a final choice with his own judgment. Let’s consider the same situation mentioned above, on the very same sports ground, each opposite team has only one and should have only one coach, who must work independently to make important decisions, including which player should be replaced, which player should present on what kind of special circumstances, and so many other critical choices. The coach, like the commanders in the war, stands on a position where he has to be competitive, and his only rival is the coach of the other side. Even if he at the same time has to consult with others, it is him who takes the final step, and he essentially has no choice but to have an excellent ability to work independently.
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总分的结构，开头提出论点，即在另外一些情况下，团队合作反过来会没有个人表现的发挥重要。后面对论点进行了进一步解释，并且举了同一个例子，但不是讨论队员的角色，而是从教练的角度来看，在做重大决定的时候，在对球队做指导的时候，不能七嘴八舌，而是要有决断力的个人拍板。 |
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There seldom exists a circumstance where cooperation and competition do not coexist. The point is that emphasis on cooperation doesn’t mean competition should be neglected or rejected, and vice versa. Therefore, it hasn't gone too far to say that both the ability of working with group and that of working independently are equally important.
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本段首先铺垫背景，说明团队合作和个人竞争总是同时存在，在这些情况下，并不是两者择其一，而是各有偏重，全面衡量。最后一句话总结这两种能力同等重要。 |
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满分要素剖析：
一、 语言表达
因为文章侧重讨论不同情况下两种方式的重要性，因此语言更偏客观和简洁，动词的使用和从句的使用，特别是表示比较的句式在文中很常见。另外，严密地使用逻辑连接词也是这篇文章的亮点。
1. To examine whether one is more important than the other, we have to look carefully into further details. 表示检查检验，这句话用了两个不同的表达来避免重复，examine 和look into。More than的句型表示对比在文中是很常见的表达，使用率很高，还有less than等变形用法。
2. In team-played sports, such as foot-ball, basket-ball; volley-ball etc., teamwork is often highly valued and is of essence. 在这句话中有两个结构值得借鉴，be highly valued和be of essence,这两个结构都是表达重要这一个意思，一个偏主观的重视，一个偏客观的精华核心，但是都比important这个界限不清的词要全面具体，让人眼前一亮。
3. Therefore, it hasn't gone too far to say that both the ability of working with group and that of working independently are equally important. 首先therefore承接上下关系，表示因果，然后下结论，用it hasn’t gone too far to say that+从句总结观点。
二、 逻辑结构
本文从正反两个方面全面地证明了作者中和的论点，在团队合作和个人表现哪个更重要这个二选一的问题上，作者从正反两个方面用同一个例子展开讨论，最后总结自己的观点，即这不是二选一的选择题，而是重要性的排序问题，二者缺一不可，只不过有在不同的情况下更侧重哪一个的区别。
文章以讨论开头，最后总结论点，是分总式的结构，每个分论点的讨论则是采用总分的结构。
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