托福考试综合写作TOP26(题目+范文赏析)

2022-05-21 10:06:17

  综合写作26

  Reading

  The zebra mussel, a freshwater shellfish native to Eastern Europe, has long been spreading out from its original habitats and has now reached parts of North America. There are reasons to believe that this invasion cannot be stopped and that it poses a serious threat to freshwater fish populations in all of North America.

  First, the history of the zebra mussels’ spread suggests that the invasion might be unstoppable. It is a prime example of an invasion made possible by human transportation. From the zebra mussel’s original habitats in Eastern Europe, ships helped spread it out along new canals built to connect Europe’s waterways. The mussel can attach itself to a ship’s bottom or can survive in the water—called “ballast water"—that the ship needs to take on to properly balance its cargo. By the early nineteenth century, the mussel had spread to the whole of Europe. It was later carried to the east coast of North America in the ballast water of ships traveling from Europe. The way ships have spread the zebra mussel in the past strongly suggests that the species will soon colonize all of North America.

  Moreover, once zebra mussels are carried to a new habitat, they can dominate it. They are a hardy species that does well under a variety of conditions, and they have a high rate of reproduction. Most important, however, zebra mussels often have no predators in their new habitats, and species without natural predators are likely to dominate their habitats.

  Finally, zebra mussels are likely to cause a decline in the overall fish population in habitats where they become dominant. The mussels are plankton eaters, which mean that they compete for food with many freshwater fish species.

  Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they support/contradict specific points made in the reading passage.

  Listening

  Narrator

  Now listen to part of a lecture on the topic you just read about.

  Professor

  Contrary to what you just read, there are ways to control the zebra mussels’ spread. What's more, it is not so clear that the mussel is a serious threat to fish populations. True, the spread of zebra mussels couldn't be controlled in the past, but that's because people didn't have enough knowledge. In fact, there are effective ways to stop ships from carrying the mussels to new locations. Here's an

  example. The way zebra mussels usually travel across the ocean is that a ship takes on some fresh "ballast water" in Europe and then empties that water into American waterways when it arrives. Full of zebra mussels, but the ship can be required to empty out the freshwater and refill with ocean water while still out in the ocean. Saltwater will kill the mussels.

  Second, it's true that zebra mussels often don't have predators in their new habitats, but that's only in the beginning. What's been happening in Europe is that local aquatic birds sooner or later notice there's a new food source around and change their habits to exploit it. They switch from whatever they were eating before to eating zebra mussels. And birds can eat a lot of mussels. So zebra mussels aren't so likely to dominate their new habitats after all.

  Finally, even in habitats where zebra mussels become dominant, is the overall fish population likely to decrease. It's true that zebra mussels may have a negative impact on fish that eat plankton. But on other fish, they can have a positive impact. For example, the mussels generate nutrients that are eaten by fish that feed near the bottom of the lake or river. So bottom-feeding fish populations may increase, even if plankton-eating fish population decrease.

  一、阅读听力要点概括

  Reading Passage

  Main points: The invasion of zebra mussel to North America is unstoppable and puts a threat to freshwater fish.

  Sub point 1: History suggests invasion might be unstoppable.

  Sub point 2: Mussels can dominate their new habitat.

  Sub point 3: Mussel threats fish population after they dominate the area.

  Lecture

  Attitude: Contrary. Unsure mussels’ threat to fish population.

  Sub Point 1: There are effective ways to stop mussels in today’s knowledge. (Salt water)

  Sub Point 2: Birds can be predators and eat mussels.

  Sub Point 3: Bottom-feeding fish may increase while plankton-eating fish decrease but overall fish population only likely to decrease.

  Answers

  二、范文逐段赏析

  Paragraph 1

  Contrary to what is argued in the passage, the lecture demonstrates how zebra mussels are not likely to become an imperative threat to freshwater fish populations in North America.

  此段功能:

  (Listening passage后文提到用L代替)

  (Reading passage后文用R代替)

  以L的观点为主要观点,mussels不会对淡水鱼群造成危害。首段一句话即确定全文逻辑为相反,contrary。

  此段结构:

  作者用一句话总结了全文讨论的问题,并告诉大家全文逻辑为相反。极其单刀直入。大家发现论点很简明时大可不必费心凑两句话再起下一段。

  Paragraph 2

  First of all, recently uncovered knowledge of zebra mussel has shed light on new ways to prevent their invasion. Even though people in the past have not been able to stop the spread of zebra mussels, knowledge and technology may help abate their spread in the future. For example, although a large amount of zebra mussels spread to America by staying in the ballast water that is emptied halfway on the journey across the Atlantic and replenished with sea water, the zebra mussels can be exterminated as soon as they are directly exposed to salt water.

  此段功能:

  以L的观点起头,谈sub topic 1,说明现代科技相比旧时代科技有机会阻止mussels spreading. 随后举听力中的具体例子为证明。

  此段结构:

  此段为总分结构。第一句陈述L的观点(可以阻止spreading),第二句陈述R中的事实(过去的人确实未能阻止mussel spreading),第三句呈现L中的事实(咸水可以消灭mussels)反驳R中的事实。

  Paragraph 3

  Furthermore, zebra mussels do not often dominate a new habitat for a long period of time. The lecture agrees that although zebra mussels may have no predators and reproduce rapidly in the beginning, it would not be long before predators take notice of this new source of food, and develop a taste for it, thus preventing its domination.

  此段功能:

  还是以L观点出发,谈sub topic 2, 说明mussels不会经常统治它的栖息地。L中同意短时期内mussels没有天敌,但没过多久掠食者就会发现这些新的美味从而结束mussels的统治。

  此段结构:

  总分结构。第一句总结L观点说明mussels完全统治是不成立的。第二句陈列L中同意R的证据。第三句陈列L反驳R的补充理由证据。

  Paragraph 4

  Finally, zebra mussels alone would not cause the decline of overall fish populations. Although zebra mussels may perhaps cause the decline of plankton eaters, as the passage suggests, they would also provide nutrients for bottom-feeding fish and ultimately cause the population of those fish to increase.

  此段功能:

  讨论sub topic 3, 说明mussels不会造成总体鱼群数量的下降。L说虽然他同意R的观点(mussels造成plankton eaters下降),但是伴随而来的bottom-feeding fish的数量上升从而导致总体鱼群数量上身。

  此段结构:

  总分结构。第一句总结L观点。第二句依然是陈列L同意R部分的证据。随后第三句陈列L中补充的证据来反驳R的观点。

  三、范文全篇总评

  1、 逻辑结构

  全文遵从总分结构,开头段直接一句话总结+逻辑,展开全文反驳基调。随后三段依照3个分论点依次展开。在分论点的论证中,作者阐明了L的态度,先小幅度同意R的观点,随即立刻补充新证据,反驳R的观点。作者利用R的证据,补充新证据后证明了R原来观点的片面性,从而达到一一驳倒的效果。

  2、语言表达

  全文十分紧凑,并启用了一些新词语赋予色彩。

  其中值得借鉴的词语和句式有:

  1. Recently uncovered knowledge of zebra mussel has shed light on new ways to prevent their invasion

  Recently uncovered:最近新发现的

  /Newly discovered/ It is recently found out/

  Shed light on: 给与了希望

  /Shown/ Given/ Illuminated

  2. The lecture agrees although………….(R的观点)………..,….…(L的观点会抵消R的观点)….。

  3. Ultimately:最终的,终极的

  /Finally/ At last/ In the end/ After all/

  Ultimately, the success of his company depends on good marketing.

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