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People have different ways of escaping the stress and difficulties of modern life. Some read; some exercise; others work in their gardens. What do you think are the best ways of reducing stress? Use specific details and examples to support your answer.
Stress is one of our biggest problems. In order to get rid of stress, I first have to identify the cause. The most common types of stress I face are with my job, friends and myself.
Work-related stress is the easiest to combat. I stop working for a while and relax. The best thing to do is to do something else. Sometimes, I get up from my desk and go down the hall to talk to my coworkers, but I don’t talk about work related subjects. Other times, I will take a short walk and get some fresh air.
Stress caused by friends is more difficult to cure. Often the cause is more complicated. My friends could have a personal problem that causes both them and myself to be anxious. The cure for stress is sympathy, discussion and simply being with my friends. You can’t walk away from your friends so you must stay together to find a solution.
Stress I cause myself is also not easy to cure. If I feel bothered by an exam or anxious for any other reason, I am patient, try my best, and leave the rest up to fate. It is important to try to live without stress. If you can avoid stress, your health, personality and relationships will all strengthen.
满分要素剖析
一、 语言表达
本文无论是句式还是用词都比较简单，甚至运用了一些口语的用法。结合作者使用的很多实例，使整篇文章读起来亲切自然，能引起读者共鸣。
1. Work-related stress is the easiest to combat.这句话虽然是个简单句，但写得很是精彩。其原因在于combat这个动词用得如此恰当，压力在常人看来是非常令人讨厌的，想尽办法想铲除的一种消极情绪，作者在这里巧用combat一词，好像是比作人与工作压力在作斗争，相信力丰富的读者可以联系到这样生动的画面。
2. 本文的句式也是对应得如此工整。如在第一段作者提到引领总结全文的一句精华The most common types of stress I face are with my job, friends and myself. 作者提到的原因有三点。那么作者就在其正文中分别对这三个cause进行了详尽的展开。在正文段落，作者开头的第一句话都是如此的简练有逻辑，并且三句话的句式都有所不同。如Work-related stress is the easiest to combat.而下面一段是Stress caused by friends is more difficult to cure.运用了过去分词作定语修饰stress。最后一段的Stress I cause myself is also not easy to cure.是一个定语从句I cause myself修饰stress。
3. 本文除了理论上的支持，也有很多生活实例的支撑，描写的惟妙惟肖，栩栩如生。如Sometimes, I get up from my desk and go down the hall to talk to my coworkers, but I don’t talk about work related subjects.这样的一句话写出来让读者瞬间被忽来一阵的亲切感所征服。因为每个人都有过类似甚至是一样的经历，如细节部分get up from my desk，不论是学生还是办公人员，每天都对着一张桌子，一台电脑，累了的时候就只能起身离开桌子。以及之后的go down the hall to talk to my coworkers和同事聊天，但是之后做出了补充，即but I don’t talk about work related subjects.绝不谈及有关工作的话题，从而能暂时的放松头脑。
二、 逻辑结构
本文逻辑结构清晰明了，一共分为四个段落来论证，出去开头段(没有结尾总结段)，其它部分在作用上均为正文段落，且其都为正面论证的写法。首先第一段作者提出一句总结全文的话，即The most common types of stress I face are with my job, friends and myself.之后作者在正文部分按这三个方面分别进行详细论述，起到了引领全文的作用。像这种写法很常见，也非常值得借鉴，可以让读者清晰地看明白作者的论证思路。第二段开始按照第一段的逻辑顺序进行展开，主要论证工作方面的压力如何释放。第三段写的是关于朋友的压力。最后一个段落写的是来自个人的压力，这个也是最核心的压力。
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