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A company is going to give some money either to support the arts or to protect the environment. Which do you think the company should choose? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The decision between supporting the arts and protecting the environment is a difficult choice to make, but I would choose protecting the environment. Arts help to maintain our culture and serve as a source of entertainment. However, we need a healthy environment in order to survive, so we must protect it. We need to protect the environment now to help prevent health problems, to maintain the ecosystem, and to preserve the Earth for our children.
Pollution from factories and cars can cause damage to the environment. Moreover, pollution causes health problems particularly for children and the elderly who have weaker immune systems. We need to ensure that there are controls on the amount of pollution when possible so as to prevent health problems caused by breathing dirty air.
We also need to pay attention to the ecosystem. Trees, plant life, and people all depend on each other. An unhealthy environment can have harmful effects on the ecosystem. For example, if a plant dies because of changes to the environment and that plant is food for an animal, that animal won't have any food. If humans use that animal as a food source, there could be big problems for not only the natural world but for human society.
If we do not respect our environment now, it will continue to get worse and our children will suffer the consequences. They may not have the same quality of air to breathe or natural beauty to admire. Without clean air to breathe, a healthy ecosystem, and a future for our children, the human race will not survive. That is why protecting our environment is important for ourselves and our descendants. If we have a healthy environment, we have healthy children who will be able to participate in and appreciate the arts.
满分因素剖析：
一、语言表达
本文句式和逻辑都并不复杂，既没有华丽的词语，也没有冗长的句子。然而作者的用词精确严谨，句子简洁有力，很好地完成了题目要求，并阐述了自己观点，不失为一篇佳作。
1. We need to ensure that there are controls on the amount of pollution when possible so as to prevent health problems caused by breathing dirty air.
此句中，ensure后面引导宾语从句，that后面的内容出现在及物动词后面，做主句的宾语。So as to 与to, in order to 的意思相同，都表示为了...的意思，引导目的状语。只不过so as to 只能有在句中，而to和in order to可以放在句首。
2. That is why protecting our environment is important for ourselves and our descendants.
此句句是一个带有表语从句的复合句结构。Why 引导表语从句，接在系动词之后，做句子的表语。That is why.... 这种结构经常出现在托福和gre写作中，意思是“。。。的原因是什么”。下次写文章要阐释原因时，除了because以外，不妨试试这种写法。
3. Arts help to maintain our culture and serve as a source of entertainment.
maintain的意思是“保持，维护”的意思，在托福作文中比较常用，还可以用preserve，keep，protect。Serve as的意思是“有....作用”，是一种高级表达，在托福作文中可以替代can。
4. If we have a healthy environment, we have healthy children who will be able to participate in and appreciate the arts.
本句作为文章的结尾，写的非常有深意，既重申了保护环境的重要性，又照顾到了文章的另外一个主题“appreciate art”。这样文章就全面的回答了题目所问的问题，这种写法值得我们学习。
二、逻辑结构
本文采用正正正的大正论述结构，简单易懂，结构清晰。文章每一个段落内都是总分(分总)结构，非常中规中矩，而且举了一些生活中的例子，使得论证逻辑严谨，内容丰富。文章的尾段写的非常有深意，首先先是一段升华，告诉我们如果不开始保护环境，我们现在将殃及我们今后的子孙。最后收束全文，重申论点，告诉我们保护环境的重要性，呼吁大家进行环境保护。
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