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Some movies are serious designed to make the audience think. Other movies are designed primarily to amuse and entertain. Which type of movie do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Movies have the power to make you laugh, cry, or think about an issue that you might not otherwise think about. Although I sometime watch movies that are serious in nature, I prefer movies that amuse and entertain. When I see an amusing movie it makes me relax, laugh, and keeps me in good spirits.
After a long day at school and work, I need a break and something to take my mind off of the troubles of the day. I can do that with an entertaining movie. When I watch an amusing movie, I don’t have to think. I just want to sit back and relax. After a movie, I then feel ready to get back to work on my studies.
Amusing movies make people laugh. Laughing is important for the soul. Laughing not only makes people feel good, but also connects people. When people laugh together, they become friends. After watching an entertaining movie which relaxes me and makes me laugh, I feel good. When I feel good I can focus more on other important things like my studies and work. Being in good spirits makes me feel better about myself and gives me a positive outlook on life.
While I can appreciate serious movies that make you think, I prefer to be amused and entertained after a long day of work. Such movies allow me to take a break from the rigors of life by making me laugh and putting me in a good mood.
满分因素剖析：
一. 语言表达
与其他满分作文相比，本文语言略显平淡。不过几乎没有语法错误和逻辑错误，语言明了，文章清晰易懂。在托福写作中，有些同学刻意去使用一些自己从未使用过的高难词汇，长难句型，往往出现很多错误，而且词不达意，从而得到很低的分数。因此，那些在写作方面没有很多积累的同学，可以学习这篇文章的写法。
1. Laughing not only makes people feel good, but also connects people.
此句中，作者用到了一个托福
2. Being in good spirits makes me feel better about myself and gives me a positive outlook on life.
此句中，being in good sprits是现在分词做主语，在托福作文中，经常会写到：做某事可以使人怎样。套用此句的格式，就是Doing sth can make me ....Outlook表示“视野，轮廓”，还可以用perspective, aspect来代替。
3. Such movies allow me to take a break from the rigors of life by making me laugh and putting me in a good mood.
这句话是上一句的另一种写法，后面用带有by的介词短语结构，可以表示原因。
二、逻辑结构
文章采用正正的大正论述结构，简单易懂，结构清晰。文章使用了许多作者的亲身经历，作者描写的十分具体生动，使得文章可读，而且说理充分，因为这些例子都很好地证明了论点，让读者感同身受。本文在结构上的美中不足就是没有一个结尾段来收束全文，这样会使文章的逻辑缺乏完整性。建议最后一定要写一段结尾，这样文章会更加完整
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