我们今天以一道雅思12test5写作真题为例,给大家详细讲解先总后分的写作结构,让大家了解这种结构在雅思写作中的特点和优势。接下来请看雅思内容:以雅思12test5写作范文为例谈先总后分的写作方法
例 (C12T5) :
1)按照大小的对比关系来考量,本图数据的特征是三类开销中第一列 (Food/Drink/Tobacco) 的比例最大,概述也非常简单直白:
Customer in the given five countries spent the most on food, drink and tobacco.
所以将其拎出来作为主体段第一段的首句很合适。之后,有5个百分比需要作为证据呈现在支持句里。原则是,绝不写流水账。通过观察数据,我们发现土耳其和爱尔兰的数据远大于其它三个国家,那么这两个国家的数据就需要一起呈现,而其它三个国家数据相似,也可以归为一类一起呈现,这样可以更充分地回应任务。而为了配合主题句中“spent the most” 的表述,我们不妨把叙述的方法调整一下:
Specifically, it cost Turkish and Irish nearly one third of their income, which accounted for 32.14% and 28.91%, respectively.
其它三个国家虽然数据要小得多,但是为了保持与段落主题的一致,我们可以把语气调整成为:
Even in the rest three countries, namely Spain, Italy and Sweden, the proportions of expenditure on this category were close to one fifth, which represented 18.80%, 16.36% and 15.77%, resp
ectively.
注意在这一段,五个国家地数据我是完整呈现的,原因很简单,它们最大,所以最重要。
2) 正文的第二段,我们需要处理十个百分比,决不要去罗列它们,否则的话是对写作任务的藐视。我们先确定概述:
By contrast, consumers in five countries allocated much less of their spending on the other two categories, which were clothing and footwear, and leisure and education.
我们这一段的主题是“much less”, 所以数据从简,在第二列里意大利的开销最大,可以提一下,但是要注意语气,不妨将其表达为,即便是在开销最大的意大利,其百分比也不足十分之一(9%),而在剩下的四个国家,这项的开销都小于十二分之一,或者用7%也行,总之要突出”小“:
With regard to the former one (clothing and footwear), it only took no more than one tenth of daily expenditure (9%) in Italy which ranked the first in all five, while the rest four only spent less than one out of a dozen (7%).
接下来说leisure and education 的时候,给一个约数即可 - 都不足5%,千万不要在纠缠在谁最大谁最小的套路里,因为不论谁大谁小都不重要了。
总之,先总后分的结构,在保证呈现清晰概述的同时,通过主题句对段落的引导,达到结构紧凑,主次分明,行文流畅的效果,是非常有效的、有明确得分目的应试文章的写作方法。
以上为雅思内容:以雅思12test5写作范文为例谈先总后分的写作方法。希望大家能够从今天的内容里学习到如何让文章主次分明,结构紧凑。预祝大家雅思作文能够有更大的突破。