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Some people prefer to live in a small town, Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
I grew up in a small town and then moved to a big city, so I have experienced the good and bad sides of both environments. I never thought that I would like living in a big city, but I was wrong. After ten years of living in one, I can’t imagine ever living in a small town again.
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本段分总结构。第一句话写出了本文要讨论的论题，和作者感受。第二句话用一个让步，引出了第三句话作者真正要写的观点立场。 |
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Small towns and big cities both have some problems in terms of transportation. In a small town, you have to own a car to ensure comfortable living and convenient transportation. In a small town, you can’t get around without a car because there isn’t any kind of public transportation. Big cities generally have heavy traffic and expensive parking, but there you have a choice of taking public transportation. It’s not free, but it’s often cheaper than driving when you consider gas and time. Especially if you don’t have a car, you’re better off in the city.
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本段是一个总分的结构。首先第一句话即点明了主旨，小城市交通不发达。后面分成了两个小部分。第一个小部分写了在小城市里的交通状况。接下来是本段第二个小部分，写了在大城市里的交通状况，即使没有车的话，大众交通也非常发达。与小城市进行了对比，佐证了观点。 |
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I love the excitement of big cities. Small towns have a slow pace. Large cities mean you have to adapt to a variety of situations, like finding a new route to work. I enjoy that challenge very much. Another part of the excitement of city living is the variety of cultural activities available. There is a wild assortment of theatre music and dance performances available in big cities; these activities are rare in small towns where a quiet and insular lifestyle is more common.
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本段是一个总分的结构本段同样分成两个小部分展开。第一个小部分针对大小两种城市可能得到的challenge进行了对比。第二个部分对大小城市的文化差异进行了对比。进而说明了作者更喜欢大城市的氛围。 |
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The final thing I think about large cities is the diversity of the people. The United States is made up of people of different races, religions, abilities, and interests. However, you seldom find such a variety of people in a small town. I think that living in an area where everyone is just like me would quickly become boring.
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本段是一个总分的结构。首先第一句话即点明了主旨。第二句举了一个美国的例子。第三句话用一个however引出了美国和一些small town 的对比。进而指出了I think that living in an area where everyone is just like me would quickly become boring.，即作者认为小城市让人们更容易变得无聊。 |
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本段是文章的第四段，也就是正文第三段，写了支持作者立场的第三个分论点。 |
Of course, security is a concern, and that is one area where small towns are superior to big cities. Still, I would rather be a bit more daring and live a large city than to feel secure but bored in a small town.
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本段只有两句话，第一句话进行让步，承认了小城市确实有“安全感”这个好处。第二句话转折，重申了作者本文的中心论点，即作者更喜欢呆在大城市里。 |
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本段是文章的尾段，对上文进行了让步承接，并对论点进行了概括分析，最后重申论点，让文章更加立场明确。 |
满分因素剖析：
一、语言表达
本文语言平实，很少使用长难句，但是表达清晰，正确，没有歧义，值得我们学习和借鉴。作者使用了一些固定搭配和高级写作词汇，使得文章表达很地道，论证内容高深，吸引了考官的眼球，彰显了作者深厚的写作功底。
1. In a small town, you have to own a car to ensure comfortable living and convenient transportation.
Ensure一词意思是“确保”，后面接动词原型或名词。本句中，ensure后面接着comfortable living和convenient transportation两个名词短语。在写作中，一般能用到名词的地方，尽量用名词替代动词，这样可以使句子更加简练，读上去很通畅。
2. There is a wild assortment of theatre music and dance performances available in big cities; these activities are rare in small towns where a quiet and insular lifestyle is more common.
本句中用到两个写作中常出现的高级词汇。Assortment意思是“分类”，相当于“kind, type”。前面用wild修饰，非常生动形象，足以体现大城市剧院表演之多，这种形容词用法值得我们学习。形容词Insular的意思是“岛屿的”，引申义为“与世隔绝的，心胸狭窄的”。大家在练习写作的同时也要注意单词的积累，把高级的词汇用到写作中，这样一来可以使表达更加地道，二来也可以让考官看到我们的语言功底。
3. Of course, security is a concern, and that is one area where small towns are superior to big cities.
此句中，名词concern意思为“担心，关切的事”。Sth is a concern，意思是...是我们关心的一个问题，可以用来引出文章的论点。形容词短语be superior to，意思是“比...更加高级”，可以成为土鳖用法“be better than”的一种高级替代。
4. The final thing I think about large cities is the diversity of the people.
此句中，the final thing I think about is ...可以用来引出文章的最后一个论点，这个句型可以应用到托福作文的写作中。
二、逻辑结构
本文结构是正正正，三个大正支持了本段的中心论点，即作者更喜欢住在大城市里。结构比较简单，逻辑严谨。此外，文章尾段使用了让步，毕竟观点中相对的多，而绝对的少。使用了让步可以让文章更加可信。
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