想要写出一篇优秀的作文并不是一件容易的事情，任何一个偏差都会影响
1.构造不平行
例：I was able to raise my TOEFL score by studying hard and I read lots of books.当运用连词将一系列的单词联接起来的时分，应当运用词性一样或同一类型的短语。
2.不知所云
例：Many companies began using computers mouth.
3.阶段过长，不分段，
主语与动词共同疑问
She are a good friend of mine that I has known for a long time.主语和动词在数方面不共同。
4.句子别扭
We heated the soup in the microwave for too long and the shape of the container changed.遣词过长或不清。换言之，句子显得滑稽可笑。
5.不要运用缩写
在正式的写作中不要运用缩写方式(can"t，don"t，it"s，we"ll，they"ve等等)，而应当运用单词的完好方式(cannot，do not，it is，we will，they have等等)。
6.相关词语重复
Since I want to go to a good school，therefore I am trying to raise my test scores.不能在该句的首要主语和首要动词前运用连词。
7.句子不完好
Many students have a hard time passing all the tests to get into college. For example， my friend in high school.句子没有首要主语或首要动词，由于本来它应是一个从句。这是一个十分多见的过错，修正的办法是将两个句子连接起来。
8.不要运用get When I got home， I got tired， so I got a book and got into bed.
Get太不正式，意思也过于迷糊，不适合用在正式的场合。应将get改为一个愈加详细的单词，如become，receive，find，achieve等等。
9.书写难以辨认，信息不准确
I would like to study in America because all modern technology originated there.传的信息不准确，或许让人听起来觉得也许不准确(假如确实是准确的，应当解说为什么这样，由于读者不认为是准确的)。上述例句中，all的意思是百分之百;咱们不能绝对地说每一件新东西都是从美国诞生的。为稳妥起见，应当运用many或most.非英语单词Computers are very helpful and advantageable.虽然看起来象个单词，本来不是，最少不是个英文单词。运用这个单词的另一种方式。
10.介词剩余
I would like to discuss about something important that you mentioned about to me during yesterday. We went to downtown yesterday to buy a watch. When I first came to the US，I did not have a lot of friends in here. In class， my classmate never mentioned about her husband.在表明这种意思时此单词不能与介词连用。这种状况多见于downtown，home，there，here等词。这些词语在英语中是副词而非名词，因此不能在它们前面增加介词。
11.跑题或不相关
There are many reasons to buy a car， preferably a nice car. 这个意思与文章的主题无关。
12.老生常谈
It is okay for children to fail sometimes.所表达的意思很一般大多数人都现已晓得到了，因此就没有必要再说出来。
13.标点疑问
I love animals. And I like to help them. Because they are helpless. So I want to become a vet.这是一个十分普遍的疑问!很多学生在句子中运用了太多的句号，尤其是当他们用手写的时分。
14.重复冗余
Personally，I believe what the newspaper prints.一种意思的表述不止一次，或许某个词语不必要。
15.奇数/复数
Many year ago，dinosaur roamed the Earths.单词需要从奇数变为复数，或许由复数成为奇数。奇数可数名词不能独自运用，应当将其变为复数方式或许加上限定词(a，the，my， his，her，Gary"s，no，any，1，3，50，most等等)。
16.拼写过错，主语、动词或宾语有疑问
I want to buy something for my mother that she will like it. There was a terrible accident happen yesterday.句子的根本构造有疑问，缺少主语、动词或宾语，或许这些成分重复。
17.口气与文章不符
I was kind of mad at the guy who vociferated angry words at me. I have heard many wonderful things about such cosmopolitan cities as Paris，London，Tokyo， and Hong Kong and I would love to visit these cities to check them out.口气与文章其他有些不相符， 也许是过于正式或许太不正式。
18.代词指代不明
If people do not speak the same language， it has a greater chance o miscommunication. I intend to complete my studies in the United States because they have good programs there.代词所指代的指示词(介词所替代的名词)不清楚。
19.过于抽象
We should use our resources on Earth because the Earth is getting worse.句子或它所表达的意思过于抽象，不能供给多少信息。
20.动词时态过错
Yesterday I will go to the store because tomorrow I needed some food.动词时态不准确。检查一下是应当用现在时、过去时、将来时仍是完结时等等。
21.选词不恰当
I was late getting home because I lost my way.在这种状况下不应当运用该词。可选择非常好的词语或许所运用的词语与文章的整体口气不符。
22.单词方式不妥
I want to creation a great web site so that I can becoming wealth.所运用的单词的方式不准确。检查一下应当运用该词的名词、形容词或副词方式的哪一种。
23.用词过错
Even I don‘t speak Spanish， I was able to find a bathroom in the department store. I gained a lot of pounds during vacation.用词过错或在此种状况下该词不是最佳用词。
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