这篇文章的题目是：Does modern technology help students learn more information and learn it more quickly? 现代科技是否能帮助学生更快速学到更多的信息?是一个一般疑问句的话题，我们要注意的是题目中体现了两方面：more information 和morequickly.所以两方面都要提到。
开头段陈述如下：Marvelous as it looks at first sight,modern technology does not help students learn informationat a greater speed and with higher efficiency in most cases; or it could work towards the opposite direction which led students to lose their initiative to learn and explore. 一开始就是一个非常新颖的句型Marvelous as it looks at first sight 这是一个as做虽然讲的倒装句型，虽然一开始看起来会觉得不可思议。由此引出作者的观点：现代科技在大多数情况下不会帮助学生告诉高速高效的学习新知识。第一句话清楚明了了交代了作者的观点。紧接着第二句转为另一个方向，高科技会导致学生丧失学习和探索的主动性。这篇满分作文不仅一开始的观点标新立异，而且在语言上一下攫取考官的眼球。没有话题背景，没有两边人的讨论模板，用新颖的语言表达了自己的观点。我们可以学到的语言很显然：Marvelous as it looks at first sight，at a greater speed and with higher efficiency in most cases，lose their initiative to learn and explore.
此篇满文作文主体段分论点如下：
1. 分散我们的注意力。
2. 面对众多资源感到困惑茫然。
3. 误导学生学习知识很容易。
主体段第一段：
First of all, oneproperty of modern technology islatently harmful to any learning mind –itdistracts. One thing we feel about when we are searching for information online is that the internet, as an outstanding example of modern technology and even regarded asthe innovator of education, provides us with not only relevant results to make use of, but alsoexternal links to click. More than once I turned on my computer to check school library for resources, but ended up watching Youtube videos. In this case, computer as arepresentative of modern technology plays a negative role in learning information. Wedoacquire more information with the convenient tool, yet most of them areirrelevant and in the endprocrastinating would lower our learning. 此段以自己使用电脑和因特网这两个具有代表性的高科技为例，验证了高科技实际上会分散学生学习的注意力这一潜在的危害。虽然例子是我们常见的事情，但是此段最大的亮点突出在语言上，有很多好的表达值得我们学习，比如：property特性，latently 潜在地，distract分散注意力，outstanding 显著杰出的, innovator创新者，more than once不止一次，representative 代表，irrelevant 不相关的，procrastinate 延迟等等。