GMAT写作优秀范文详解——人口下降就业率上升

2022-05-30 12:36:00

GMAT作文范文及解析:人口下降失业率上升

  The following appeared in the editorial section of a local newspaper.

  “In the first four years that Montoya has served as mayor of the city of San Perdito, the population has decreased and the unemployment rate has increased. Two businesses have closed for each new business that has opened. Under Varro, who served as mayor for four years before Montoya, the unemployment rate decreased and the population increased. Clearly, the residents of San Perdito would be best served if they voted Montoya out of office and reelected Varro.”

  地方性报纸的编者按:

  在Montoya当San Perdito市长的头4年里,人口下降而失业率上升。每当一个新企业开业,就有两个旧的关门。而在Montoya之前Uarro当市长的4年里,失业率下降人口增长。很明显,San Perdito的居民重新选举Varro而非Montoya会得到更好的服务。

  1. It is fallacious reasoning unless other possible casual explanations have been considered and ruled out. recession depression downturn低迷时期 is part of a picture of ... mayor

  2. set the stage for Yet another possibility is that Varro enjoyed a period of economic stability and Varro's own administration set the stage for the unemployment and the decline in population .

  3. availability emotionally intentionally specific specifically anger angry citizen thereby bypass

  4. cast one's vote for sb. eliminate abolish casual emotional appeal

  1, 缺乏standard ratio of the closed business to new business in the whole country, 不能说两个倒闭一个开就是坏事,很可能淘汰eliminate through selection or contest了out of date的企业,建立了更多具有competitive advantages 的企业。也是好事。

  2, 未排除他因造成了不同。很可能是因为在P在任期间,全国的经济不景气,造成了事业更增加。而不是两个市长的不同。假定过去和现在一样,也是个错误!recession depression downturn低迷时期

  The recommendation endorsed in this argument is that residents of San Perdito vote current mayor Montoya out of office, and re-elect former mayor Varro. The reasons cited are that during Montoya’s four years in office the population has decreased while unemployment has increased, whereas during Varro’s term unemployment declined while the population grew. This argument involves the sort of gross oversimplification and emotional appeal typical of political rhetoric; for this reason it is unconvincing.

  First of all, the author assumes that the Montoya administration caused the unemployment in San Perdito as well as its population loss. The line of reasoning is that because Montoya was elected before the rise in unemployment and the decline in population, the former event caused the latter. But this is fallacious reasoning unless other possible causal explanations have been considered and ruled out. For example, perhaps a statewide or nationwide recession is the cause of these events. Or perhaps the current economic downturn is part of a larger picture of economic cycles and trends, and has nothing to do with who happens to be mayor. Yet another possibility is that Varro enjoyed a period of economic stability and Varro’s own administration set the stage for the unemployment and the decline in population the city is now experiencing under Montoya.

  Secondly, job availability and the economic health of one’s community are issues that affect people emotionally. The argument at hand might have been intentionally oversimplified for the specific purpose of angering citizens of San Perdito, and thereby turning them against the incumbent mayor. Arguments that bypass relevant, complex reasoning in favor of stirring up emotions do nothing to establish their conclusions; they are also unfair to the parties involved.

  In conclusion, I would not cast my vote for Varro on the basis of this weak argument. The author must provide support for the assumption that Mayor Montoya has caused San Perdito’s poor economy. Moreover, such support would have to involve examining and eliminating other possible causal factors. Only with more convincing evidence could this argument become more than just an emotional appeal.

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