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Topic: Teaching something to another person can help you to learn or master a subject or process?
Think carefully about the issue presented in the following excerpt and assignment below.
“If you would thoroughly know anything, teach it to others. One who ceases to learn cannot adequately teach.”- Tryon Edwards, Dictionary of Thoughts
Assignment: Do you think that teaching something to another person can help you to learn or master a subject or process? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experiences, or observations.
习作修改 学生习作(第一段)
Tryon Edwards took a firm stand, saying that “if you would thoroughly know anything, teach it to others. One who ceases to learn cannot adequately teach.” It means that teaching something to another people can help people learn a subject well. To me, I definitely believe it is true[1]--- teaching can make the teacher master a process better---because I have experienced and read such things in my daily life.
语言修改
Tryon Edwards took a firm stand, saying that “if you would thoroughly know anything, teach it to others. One who ceases to learn cannot adequately teach.” This means that teaching something to another person can help you to learn a subject well. To me, I definitely believe it is true---teaching can make the teacher master a process better--- because I have experienced and read such things in my daily life.
本段评点
这一段话虽然立刻表明了作者自己的立场，但是内容不饱满，大多叙述是重复和多余的。比如，It means 这一句完全是多余的。Tryon Edwards说的话本来很明白，浅显，不用再解释一遍。或者，可以说自己的那句解释，但是不用引用Tryon Edwards的那句话。
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